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PART 3Discussion topics: Looking after historic placesExample questions: How do people in your country feel about protecting historic buildings? Do you think an area can benefit from having an interesting historic place locally? In what way? What do you think v.1

PART 3Discussion topics: Looking after historic placesExample questions: How do people in your country feel about protecting historic buildings? Do you think an area can benefit from having an interesting historic place locally? In what way? What do you think v. 1
Children's should be taught to be good members of society. It is often argued that parents educate their children's to grow as prominent members while, some argue that the school plays a vital role in this. This essay agrees that teacher's guidance is more significant than parents. This essay will discuss both points of view. It is clear that student spends only less time at home, and working parents will hardly get a chance to train their sons or daughters because of their busy working hours. Also, Youngsters spent around 70% of their productive time in schools and the remaining hours in travel and relaxation. Teachers are noticing child characters easily and can help them to grow with their huge working experience. For Example, In India Schools conducted a personal development program to help children grow socially and independently. As a result, most of the billion dollar companies run by Indian peoples. However, many disagree that the parent's contribution should be more. In developed countries, Both parents work for organizations and doesn't have enough time to teach their children. Also, In some cases, parents lag the knowledge to guide their yards. Parent's knowledge varies among different peoples. It will result in an unbiased situation. For example, In the China organization work hours are very high and because of no work life balance, the younger generation is feeling depressed and it is evident that schools care is important. To Conclude, School contribution plays a significant factor in shaping children's character in society. Some still feel that instead parents should play a role, but which is not possible due to time constraints and work-life balance of parents.
Children's should
be taught
to be
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good
members of society. It is
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often
argued that
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parents
educate their children's to grow as prominent members while,
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some
argue that the
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school
plays a vital role in this. This essay
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agrees
that teacher's guidance is more significant than
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parents
. This essay will discuss both points of view.

It is
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clear
that student spends
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only
less
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time
at home, and working
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parents
will hardly
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get
a chance to train their sons or daughters
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because
of their busy working hours.
Also
, Youngsters spent around 70% of their productive
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time
in
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schools
and the remaining hours in travel and relaxation. Teachers are noticing child characters
easily
and can
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help
them to grow with their huge working experience.
For Example
, In India
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Schools
conducted a personal development program to
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help
children grow
socially
and
independently
.
As a result
, most of the billion dollar
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companies
run by Indian peoples.

However
,
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many
disagree that the parent's contribution should be more. In
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developed countries
, Both
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parents
work for organizations and doesn't have
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enough
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time
to teach their children.
Also
, In
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some
cases,
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parents
lag the knowledge to guide their yards. Parent's knowledge varies among
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different
peoples. It will result in an unbiased situation.
For example
, In the China organization work hours are
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very
high and
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because
of no
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work life
balance, the younger generation is feeling depressed and it is evident that
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schools
care is
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important
.

To Conclude
,
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School
contribution plays a significant factor in shaping children's character in society.
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Some
still
feel that
instead
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parents
should play a role,
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but
which is not possible due to
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time
constraints and work-life balance of
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parents
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay PART 3Discussion topics: Looking after historic placesExample questions: How do people in your country feel about protecting historic buildings? Do you think an area can benefit from having an interesting historic place locally? In what way? What do you think v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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