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Part 2You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you’re going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. Describe something interesting that you once found. You should say: what you found v.1

Part 2You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you’re going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. Describe something interesting that you once found. You should say: what you found v. 1
In recent times, people judge a person according to their wealth rather than their behaviour that seemed to be important in yesteryears. It is because the world has become more materialistic and people's minds are being influenced by TV commercials. People admire those who has an abundance of wealth. That is to say that they have luxury houses and other things that people want to have in their home. In order to fulfil their desire people have forgotten the values that our ancestors had in their time. People only want to make relation with who has more money than them. For example, The Jang Newspaper asked people about would they like to have a person as their life partner who cannot afford a car, 68% replied no they would not marry that person. Television has influenced the people’s mind a lot. In other words, tv has shaped their minds to think of this perspective that those who has more money and other materialistic things are more respectful than those who do not. Tv commercials daily show these kind of things that are influencing people’s mind. For instance, a report on a new article reported that 61% of dramas which are telecasted daily on tv in Pakistan show that those who have more funds are more respectable member of the society. In conclusion, people have forgotten the value that ancestors had and become obsessed with money because they would like to have those things in the future for themselves that they think a rich person has and tv has influenced the people a lot in making their mind like this.
In recent times,
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people
judge a person according to their wealth
rather
than their
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behaviour
that seemed to be
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important
in
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yesteryears
. It is
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because
the world has become more materialistic and
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people
's
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minds
are
being influenced
by TV commercials.

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People
admire those
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who
has an abundance of wealth.
That is
to say that they have luxury
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houses
and other things that
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people
want to have in their home. In order to fulfil their desire
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people
have forgotten the values that our ancestors had in their time.
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People
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only
want to
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make
relation with
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who
has more money than them.
For example
, The
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Jang
Newspaper asked
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people
about would they like to have a person as their life partner
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who
cannot afford a car, 68% replied no they would not marry that person.

Television has influenced the
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people’s
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mind
a lot.
In other words
,
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tv
has shaped their
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minds
to
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think
of this perspective that those
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who
has more money and other materialistic things are more respectful than those
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who
do not.
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Tv
commercials daily
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show
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of things that are influencing
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people’s
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mind
.
For instance
, a report on a new article reported that 61% of dramas which are
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telecasted
daily on
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tv
in Pakistan
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show
that those
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who
have more funds are more respectable member of the society.

In conclusion
,
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people
have forgotten the value that ancestors had and become obsessed with money
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because
they would like to have those things in the future for themselves that they
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think
a rich person has and
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tv
has influenced the
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people
a lot in making their
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mind
like this.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Part 2You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you’re going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. Describe something interesting that you once found. You should say: what you found v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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