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PART 2Describe one of your friends. You should say: how you met how long you have known each other how you spend time together and explain why you like this person. You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to thin v.1

PART 2Describe one of your friends. You should say: how you met how long you have known each other how you spend time together and explain why you like this person. You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to thin v. 1
It is thought by some individuals that longer prison sentences would reduce crime rates. Others think that there are other ways of reducing it. Although staying in prison for long would ensure that they learn from their mistakes, I believe giving them parole will be more effective. Reduction of crime in a state or country is not dependent on the time an individual stays in detention. Although it is thought by some that it will ensure that they learn from their mistakes and decide to do right. I disagree with this view. As a teenager, there was a young boy in my area that was caught for stealing, he was taken to prison and he stayed awhile. However, when he was released he went back to stealing because to him that is all he knew how to do. Therefore, keeping prisoners for a long period might not be the answer to crime reduction. On the other hand, giving the prisoners parole on time will ensure they integrate into the society and learn to live again. In other words, they can learn to cope without thinking of stealing because they have not been left in the cell for a long time. As a teenager, I saw my uncle blend back in the community after he served the jail term for six months for stealing. So, parole is an effective way of integrating them back into the society and they in turn can be good members of the community. In conclusion, despite people vary in their opinion, I consider allowing early release of criminals will ensure that they become good members of the society.
It is
thought
by
some
individuals that longer prison sentences would
reduce
crime rates. Others
think
that there are
other
ways of reducing it. Although staying in prison for long would
ensure
that they
learn
from their mistakes, I believe giving them parole will be more effective.

Reduction of crime in a state or country is not dependent on the time an individual stays in detention. Although it is
thought
by
some
that it will
ensure
that they
learn
from their mistakes and decide to do right. I disagree with this view. As a
teenager
, there was a young boy in my area that
was caught
for stealing, he
was taken
to
prison and
he stayed awhile.
However
, when he
was released
he went back to stealing
because
to him
that is
all he knew how to do.
Therefore
, keeping prisoners for a long period might not be the answer to crime reduction.

On the
other
hand, giving the prisoners parole on time will
ensure
they integrate into the society and
learn
to
live
again. In
other
words, they can
learn
to cope without thinking of stealing
because
they have not been
left
in the cell for a long time. As a
teenager
, I
saw
my uncle blend back in the community after he served the jail term for six months for stealing.
So
, parole is an effective way of integrating them back into the
society and
they in turn can be
good
members of the community.

In conclusion
, despite
people
vary in their opinion, I consider allowing early release of criminals will
ensure
that they become
good
members of the society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay PART 2Describe one of your friends. You should say: how you met how long you have known each other how you spend time together and explain why you like this person. You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to thin v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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