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Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter•Describe the problem•Say how long it has been a problem•Explain what action you want the neighbor to take v.1

Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter•Describe the problem•Say how long it has been a problem•Explain what action you want the neighbor to take v. 1
It cannot be denied that hardships and unpleasant circumstances are unavoidable facts of human life. Some people suggest that accepting the other is the others way, while other prefer making efforts to overcome troubles. There are myriad arguments used to support the claim that people should stop fighting against the unpleasant situations. Firstly, putting up with difficult problems may help people avoid being overwhelmed by negative emotions. For example, if an applicant who are being late for an important interview due to traffic jam can accept the situation and not rage at the traffic light as well as other drivers, he will absolutely arrive at the interview less distressed. Furthermore, drowning in own thoughts of trying to control the beyond ability matters may result in frustration and desperation along with unconscious actions such as suicide, drug abuse or committing crime. In contrast, some people believe that it is better to try and improve the bad circumstances. The world is full of inspiring examples of people who has been able to turn hardships into good situations by clearly understanding the value of choice. For instance, in case of being unmarked played or shortage of money, rather than looking for somebody to blame or complain to, some people may use opportunities to find new jobs, come back to school to develop valuable skills or start their own business instead. This may bring benefits to only themselves but also many people around. Besides, a problem solved will help people to build their confidence to face with the next similar issue happening. In conclusion, although there is some evidence to support the claim that it would be better to accept what happened, I believe that people should spend more time and effort to overcome the bad situations.
It cannot
be denied
that hardships and unpleasant circumstances are unavoidable facts of human life.
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Some
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people
suggest that accepting the
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other
is the others way, while
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other
prefer making efforts to overcome troubles.

There are myriad arguments
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used
to support the claim that
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people
should
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stop
fighting against the unpleasant
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situations
.
Firstly
, putting up with difficult problems may
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help
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people
avoid
being overwhelmed
by
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negative
emotions.
For example
, if an applicant who are being late for an
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important
interview due to traffic jam can accept the
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situation
and not rage at the traffic light
as well
as
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other
drivers, he will
absolutely
arrive at the interview less distressed.
Furthermore
, drowning in
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own
thoughts of trying to control the beyond ability matters may result in frustration and desperation along with unconscious actions such as suicide, drug abuse or committing crime.

In contrast
,
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some
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people
believe that it is better to
"Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "try to" is recommended for writing.
try and
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improve
the
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bad
circumstances. The world is full of inspiring examples of
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people
who has been able to turn hardships into
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good
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situations
by
clearly
understanding the value of choice.
For instance
, in case of
being unmarked
played or shortage of money,
rather
than looking for somebody to blame or complain to,
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some
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people
may
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use
opportunities to find new jobs,
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come
back to school to develop valuable
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skills
or
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start
their
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own
business
instead
. This may bring benefits to
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only
themselves
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but
also
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many
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people
around.
Besides
, a problem solved will
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help
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people
to build their confidence to face with the
next
similar issue happening.

In conclusion
, although there is
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some
evidence to support the claim that it would be better to accept what happened, I believe that
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people
should spend more time and effort to overcome the
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bad
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situations
.
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IELTS essay Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter•Describe the problem•Say how long it has been a problem•Explain what action you want the neighbor to take v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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