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PART 3Discussion topics: Qualities of friendsExample questions: What do you think are the most important qualities for friends to have? Which are more important to people, their family or their friends? Why? What do you think causes friendships to break up? Ot v.1

PART 3Discussion topics: Qualities of friendsExample questions: What do you think are the most important qualities for friends to have? Which are more important to people, their family or their friends? Why? What do you think causes friendships to break up? Ot v. 1
Museums are nowadays opening on every part of the world. Regardless of considering an investment, Government of almost every country is considering to open the museums to increase tourism. The fee structure of some museums contains an admission fee and thus, this significantly improves the cash position of the museum. Nevertheless, some of the people may believe that the museums should not charge admission fees. Admission fee acts as a maintenance cost or repair cost for the museums. Some of these places include historical things that play an important role to improve the economic situation of the country. For instance, if a state has well maintained museums, tourists will be attracted to visit such places and therefore, this will bring foreign cash and improve the economy of the country. Similarly, if the country has no well-maintained museums, people will stop visiting their and investment cost will simply be dissolved. Some individuals may be reluctant to pay admission fee to the management of the museum because they may feel that the services available in the museum will not be of remarkable quality. To illustrate, they may feel as the museum are not repaired periodically, there is no benefit of paying this fee. Furthermore, some may also prefer not to pay such fee because they think services which they require are not available on these museums. Additionally, some individuals want to join museum for a certain period of time and, thereby they regard not to pay this fee. In my opinion, despite the fact of three disadvantages explained in this essay, paying admission fee will always benefit as this will surge the economic activity of the country.
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Museums
are nowadays opening on every part of the world. Regardless of considering an investment,
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Government
of almost every
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country
is considering to open the
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museums
to increase tourism. The
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fee
structure of
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some
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museums
contains an
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admission
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fee
and
thus
, this
significantly
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improves
the cash position of the
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museum
.
Nevertheless
,
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some of the
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people
may believe that the
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museums
should not charge
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admission
fees.

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fee
acts as a maintenance cost or repair cost for the
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museums
.
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Some
of these places include historical things that play an
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important
role to
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improve
the economic situation of the
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country
.
For instance
, if a state has well maintained
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museums
, tourists will
be attracted
to visit such places and
therefore
, this will bring foreign cash and
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improve
the economy of the
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country
.
Similarly
, if the
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country
has no well-maintained
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museums
,
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people
will
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stop
visiting their and investment cost will
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individuals may be reluctant to pay
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admission
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fee
to the management of the
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museum
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because
they may feel that the services available in the
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museum
will not be of remarkable quality. To illustrate, they may feel as the
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museum
are not repaired
periodically
, there is no benefit of paying this
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fee
.
Furthermore
,
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some
may
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fee
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because
they
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think
services which they require are not available on these
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museums
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some
individuals want to
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join
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museum
for a certain period of time and, thereby they regard not to pay this fee.

In my opinion, despite the fact of three disadvantages
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explained
in this essay, paying
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admission
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fee
will always benefit as this will surge the economic activity of the
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country
.
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IELTS essay PART 3Discussion topics: Qualities of friendsExample questions: What do you think are the most important qualities for friends to have? Which are more important to people, their family or their friends? Why? What do you think causes friendships to break up? Ot v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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