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Parents often over anxious to teach their children to speak Of children are slow developers parents will often allow psychologists and schools to intervene and give their children speech theraphy Do you think children develop at different rates and so sho v.1

Parents often over anxious to teach their children to speak Of children are slow developers parents will often allow psychologists and schools to intervene and give their children speech theraphy Do you think children develop at different rates and so sho v. 1
The earth's surface average temperature have been increased since the past decade. It is responsible for harmful effects on our environment. In this essay, I will discuss about both the causes and the solution for global warming. First of all, the deforestation of trees and emission of hazardous taint into the atmosphere from industrial factories results in major part of global warming and the depletion of ozone layer around the earth. One particular good example, which happened recently is the fire in amazon rain forest. Many trees as well as animals were burned and tribes who live in the forest lost their homes. It is important to note that this activity is done by a group of people because of construction. So, logging and other factors results in rise of surface temperature. In contrast, planting more trees and decreasing the emission of smoke from the industrial factories can be the best way to decrease it afflicts. In addition to this, using of electric vehicles instead of fuel powered vehicles can be beneficial. For instance, many electric vehicles are used in the USA, in the place of fuel vehicles which resulted in the decrease of pollution levels, but also there should be strict rules against the logging. So, there should be a rule to use electric vehicles and use of clean energy from the sun in the form of solar power to generate electricity in the place of fossil fuels. By the way of conclusion, I indeed that the deforestation and factories are the main cause for the global warming. Moreover, this can be solved by growing the forests with high yield trees which helps to lower the temperature of the earth's surface by rain. The government should conserve the forests with strict rules against the logging.
The earth's surface average temperature have
been increased
since the past decade. It is responsible for harmful effects on our environment. In this essay, I will
Did you mean simply "discuss both"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about both
the causes and the solution for global warming.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the deforestation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
and emission of hazardous taint into the atmosphere from industrial factories results in major part of global warming and the depletion of ozone layer around the earth. One particular
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good
example, which happened recently is the fire
The usual collocation for "amazon" is "on". Did you mean "on amazon"?
in amazon
rain
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forest
.
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Many
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trees
as well
as animals
were burned
and tribes who
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live
in the
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forest
lost their homes. It is
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important
to note that this activity
is done
by a group of
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people
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because
of construction.
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So
, logging and other factors results in rise of surface temperature.

In contrast
, planting more
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trees
and decreasing the emission of smoke from the industrial factories can be the best way to decrease it afflicts.
In addition
to this, using of electric
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vehicles
instead
of fuel powered
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vehicles
can be beneficial.
For instance
,
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many
electric
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vehicles
are
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used
in the USA, in the place of fuel
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vehicles
which resulted in the decrease of pollution levels,
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but
also
there should be strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
against the logging.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, there should be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
to
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use
electric
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vehicles
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of clean energy from the sun in the form of solar power to generate electricity in the place of fossil fuels.

By the way of conclusion, I
indeed
that the deforestation and factories are the main cause for the global warming.
Moreover
, this can
be solved
by growing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forests
with high yield
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to lower the temperature of the earth's surface by rain. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should conserve the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forests
with strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
against the logging.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Parents often over anxious to teach their children to speak Of children are slow developers parents will often allow psychologists and schools to intervene and give their children speech theraphy Do you think children develop at different rates and so sho v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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