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Some people believe that studying history is very important and we must study the past to understand the present. Others say that it is useless and should not be studied at all. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people believe that studying history is very important and we must study the past to understand the present. Others say that it is useless and should not be studied at all. v. 2
It is often argued by few that history as a subject is crucial to learn about the historic moments and understand current situations, whilst others state that it is not necessary at all. This essay will further discuss both the views and present the opinion. To begin with, History is the only way one can study patterns, by using them to relate to the current trend, it would be possible to predict the consequences. The behaviour of humans that has led to the wars in the past, will be the basis for authorities to escape the mistakes again and create tension in the world. For example, UNO was formed as an authority to maintain peace among the nations, and its rules and regulations were formed considering the errors of the past, which resulted in WW1 and WW2. UNO is so far successful as there is no such evidence of conflict. However, on the other hand, due to the advancement of society, there is very less or no relevance with the past. Studying ancient civilizations and architecture, would not help fast moving world, and this will be mere waste of time. For instance, Greek culture and architecture and the modern buildings and cultures are very different, therefore, without even knowing history, one can easily get through the life. In conclusion, humanities is a subject that is designed to understand human behaviour since it has evolved. History is a way to keep the past alive, and also it is a very important tool to avoid errors of the past, but the world is moving at an increasing pace, its relevance to current generation is not much. Hence, instead of studying history, people should invest time in learning other subjects that are essential to survive.
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argued by few that
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history
as a subject is crucial to learn about the historic moments and understand
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current
situations, whilst others state that it is not necessary at all. This essay will
further
discuss both the views and present the opinion.

To
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begin
with,
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History
is the
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only
way one can study patterns, by using them to relate to the
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current
trend, it would be possible to predict the consequences. The
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behaviour
of humans that has led to the wars in the
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past
, will be the basis for authorities to escape the mistakes again and create tension in the world.
For example
, UNO
was formed
as an authority to maintain peace among the nations, and its
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rules
and regulations
were formed
considering the errors of the
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past
, which resulted in WW1 and WW2. UNO is
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so
far successful as there is no such evidence of conflict.

However
,
on the other hand
, due to the advancement of society, there is
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very
less or no relevance with the
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past
. Studying ancient civilizations and architecture, would not
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help
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fast
moving world, and this will be mere waste of time.
For instance
, Greek culture and architecture and the modern buildings and cultures are
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very
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different
,
therefore
, without even knowing
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history
, one can
easily
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get
through the life.

In conclusion
, humanities is a subject that
is designed
to understand human
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behaviour
since it has evolved.
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History
is a way to
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keep
the
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past
alive, and
also
it is a
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very
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important
tool to avoid errors of the
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past
,
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but
the world is moving at an increasing pace, its relevance to
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current
generation is not much.
Hence
,
instead
of studying
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history
,
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people
should invest time in learning other subjects that are essential to survive.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that studying history is very important and we must study the past to understand the present. Others say that it is useless and should not be studied at all. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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