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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest way that government and individual can tackle this problem. v.18

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest way that government and individual can tackle this problem. v. 18
Overpopulation underline every environment and economical problem. Nowadays, in metro city's high population creating various issues which affect society and the environment. In my opinion, poverty and pollution are their major issues which arise due to overpopulation and government should implement certain steps to have control of it. Irrefutably, overpopulation arises due to many factors such as illiteracy, lack of education, depletion of various resources. In metro cities, highly populated areas cause high pollution. Due to highly populated cities, people prefer to use vehicles and many other sources which unconditionally affect the health of people and the environment. Moreover, the second major factor to rise in the number of population is poverty. Due to poverty, many individuals can't get an adequate level of education. Hence, leads to high increase in populace growth rate. For example: I personally experienced it when I ask a labourer that why he had 4 kids? His reply led me in shock. He said that the more hand, the more they can earn money. However, government should take initiative steps to tackle against such critical issue. The government should launch campaigns in which is awareness is promoted against overpopulation. Strict law should be implemented to control the growth rate. For example: our neighbourhood nation China takes strict steps to control population. As per the report, in 2030 China will become the 2nd populated country instead of 1st. In conclusion, overpopulation is a critical issue of our nation. This issue can lead to many factors and we all need to take adequate steps to control the growth rate of population
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Overpopulation
underline every environment and economical problem. Nowadays, in metro city's high
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population
creating various
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issues
which affect society and the environment. In my opinion, poverty and pollution are their major
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issues
which arise
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due
to
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overpopulation
and
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government
should implement certain
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steps
to have
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control
of it.

Irrefutably
,
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overpopulation
arises
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due
to
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many
factors such as illiteracy, lack of education, depletion of various resources. In metro cities,
highly
populated areas cause high pollution.
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Due
to
highly
populated cities,
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people
prefer to
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use
vehicles and
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many
other sources which
unconditionally
affect the health of
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people
and the environment.
Moreover
, the second major factor to rise in the number of
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population
is poverty.
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Due
to poverty,
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many
individuals can't
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get
an adequate level of education.
Hence
, leads to high increase in populace growth rate.
For example
: I
personally
experienced it when I ask a
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labourer
that why he had 4 kids? His reply led me in shock. He said that the more hand, the more they can earn money.

However
,
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government
should take initiative
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steps
to tackle against such critical
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issue
. The
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government
should launch campaigns in which is awareness
is promoted
against
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overpopulation
. Strict law should
be implemented
to
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control
the growth rate.
For example
: our
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neighbourhood
nation China takes strict
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steps
to
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control
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population
. As per the report, in 2030 China will become the 2nd populated country
instead
of 1st.

In conclusion
,
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overpopulation
is a critical
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issue
of our nation. This
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issue
can lead to
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many
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factors and
we all need to take adequate
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steps
to
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control
the growth rate of
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population
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest way that government and individual can tackle this problem. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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