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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v.12

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 12
Overpopulation in urban areas, has become a serious problem. They have led to many consequences. This essay will discuss the reasons for this problem and put forward solutions that the government and the individuals, should take to handle these critical situations. Quite a lot of people, prefer moving to the urban areas for the sake of own well-being. Due to this, many industries started to find an appropriate place, so that it would attract all the people coming for jobs. As, many people started to move, the population in the urban places, grew at a dramatic rate, whereas there was a huge decline in the number of trees. However, this seems to be the major reason why there is a reduction in rainfall, in the cities. The ruling body can likely introduce separate places for the residents and all those industries. As, an illustration in the United States of America, the industries have been isolated from residential places which reduces the amount of smoke, pollution, as they are affecting the trees, that has caused a reduction in the amount of rain. On the other hand, the heat of the earth also started to rise, by coining a term Global Warming. Although, rural areas have a lot of agricultural land, even the urban cities tend to have a half of them. But to manage the increasing growth of people, all those lands have to be demolished and constructed into apartments. Each and every individual, is more likely to have own vehicle and make their area over crowded. By doing so, there is an increase in the number of vehicles on the road, as the preference of the public transport has dropped, this also raises the traffic rate. As, the traffic rate grows, this leads to congestion in the road, which also scales up the accident rates. Even after the accident takes place, there is no ambulance arriving at the right time, this is also due to this situation. As, an illustration, when my neighbour wanted to attend a reception in Nungambakkam, he got stuck in the hectic traffic, which left him in vain and out of anger he returned without attending the reception. The government can introduce the lane systems, that is being followed in the rest of the countries, there is a separate lane for each and every vehicle, including heavy vehicle to the ambulance. In conclusion, overpopulation has created a lot of problems, ranging from the reduction of rainfall to accidents. The government should introduce many policies to overcome all this, and they should also get proper support from the individuals.
Overpopulation in
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urban
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areas
, has become a serious problem. They have led to
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many
consequences. This essay will discuss the reasons for this problem and put forward solutions that the
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government
and the individuals, should take to handle these critical situations.

Quite
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a lot of
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people
, prefer moving to the
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urban
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areas
for the sake of
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own
well-being. Due to this,
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many
industries
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started
to find an appropriate
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place
,
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so
that it would attract all the
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people
coming for jobs. As,
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many
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people
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started
to
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move
, the population in the
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urban
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places
, grew at a dramatic
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rate
, whereas there was a huge decline in the number of trees.
However
, this seems to be the major reason why there is a reduction in rainfall, in the cities. The ruling body can likely introduce separate
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places
for the residents and all those industries. As, an illustration in the United States of America, the industries have
been isolated
from residential
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places
which
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reduces
the amount of smoke, pollution, as they are affecting the trees, that has caused a reduction in the amount of rain.
On the other hand
, the heat of the earth
also
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started
to rise, by coining a term Global Warming.

Although, rural
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areas
have
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a lot of
agricultural land, even the
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urban
cities tend to have a half of them.
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But
to manage the increasing growth of
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people
, all those lands
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have to
be demolished
and constructed into apartments. Each and every individual, is more likely to have
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own
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vehicle
and
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make
their
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area
over crowded. By doing
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so
, there is an increase in the number of
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vehicles
on the road, as the preference of the public transport has dropped, this
also
raises the traffic
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rate
. As, the traffic
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rate
grows, this leads to congestion in the road, which
also
scales up the accident
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rates
. Even after the accident takes
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place
, there is no ambulance arriving at the right time, this is
also
due to this situation. As, an illustration, when my
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neighbour
wanted to attend a reception in
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Nungambakkam
, he
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got
stuck in the hectic traffic, which
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left
him in vain and out of anger he returned without attending the reception. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can introduce the lane systems,
that is
being followed
in the rest of the countries, there is a separate lane for each and every
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vehicle
, including heavy
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vehicle
to the ambulance.

In conclusion
, overpopulation has created
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a lot of
problems, ranging from the reduction of rainfall to accidents. The
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government
should introduce
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many
policies to overcome all this, and they should
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
proper support from the individuals.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
432 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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