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Moving from place to place can be stressful but can also bring new opportunities. Do you prefer to live in one place for a long time or to move somewhere new every few years? Use specific reasons to explain your opinion? v.1

Moving from place to place can be stressful but can also bring new opportunities. Do you prefer to live in one place for a long time or to move somewhere new every few years? Use specific reasons to explain your opinion? v. 1
Nowadays, undoubtedly e-shopping is a popular option among buyers. It is considered that an increasing trend of online shopping will one day results in the closing of all shops in cities and towns. In my view, I agree with this assertion and this essay will discuss reasons for it. To begin with, the online shopping provides convenience to the customers, which would lead to the closing of shops. This is because due to the hectic schedule, people are looking for hassle-free options of buying and the rising trend of the e-shopping is providing it. This, in turn, would make all the population in the future to rely on purchasing commodities online, which would lead to the closing of local vendors. A study from the World Business Organization, for instance, showed that owing to the smooth online buying process provided by “Amazon” local market’s popularity have declined from 70% to 20% in 5 years. Apart from the convenience, time-saving is another predominant factor of the e-shopping, which would ultimately lead to the closing of the local retailers. Due to the workaholic trend among people, they choose purchasing option, which requires their less time. The online shopping requires a few minutes to buy a certain product, which is not the case with shopping from the local stores. Research indicates, for example, that 80% of the customers in Australia decide on shopping through the internet because of its time-saving aspect. Thus. If this trend continues, it would eliminate even the very least need of shopping from local shops. In conclusion, in my opinion, I agree that an increasing growth of the online shopping items would result in the vanishing of different shops in cities and towns as it is providing a convenient way of buying and also is saving time.
Nowadays,
undoubtedly
e-shopping is a popular option among buyers. It
is considered
that an increasing
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trend
of
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
will
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one day
results in the
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closing
of all shops in cities and towns. In my view, I
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agree
with this assertion and this essay will discuss reasons for it.

To
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begin
with, the
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online
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shopping
provides convenience to the customers, which would lead to the
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closing
of shops. This is
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because
due to the hectic schedule,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are looking for hassle-free options of buying and the rising
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trend
of the e-shopping is providing it. This, in turn, would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
all the population in the future to rely on purchasing commodities
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
, which would lead to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closing
of
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local
vendors. A study from the World Business Organization,
for instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that owing to the smooth
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
buying process provided by “Amazon”
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
market’s popularity have declined from 70% to 20% in 5 years.

Apart from the convenience, time-saving is another predominant factor of the e-shopping, which would
ultimately
lead to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closing
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
retailers. Due to the workaholic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trend
among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, they choose purchasing option, which requires their less time. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
requires a few minutes to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a certain product, which is not the case with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
stores. Research indicates,
for example
, that 80% of the customers in Australia decide on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
through the internet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its time-saving aspect.
Thus
. If this
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trend
continues, it would eliminate even the
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very
least need of
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shopping
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
shops.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that an increasing growth of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
items would result in the vanishing of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
shops in cities and towns as it is providing a convenient way of buying and
also
is saving time.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Moving from place to place can be stressful but can also bring new opportunities. Do you prefer to live in one place for a long time or to move somewhere new every few years? Use specific reasons to explain your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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