Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Over population of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v.2

Over population of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 2
Overpopulation and negative effects of it are major concerns in cities all around the globe. There are many negative outcomes that the growing number of the population contributes and I think traffic congestion and rapidly increasing crime rate are two major drastic effects of overpopulation. This essay portrays the details of aforementioned two issues and suggests relevant solutions. Undeniably, choking traffic makes the city life difficult. Industries, schools and hospitals are rooted in the city areas. Everyday commuters spend hours after hours in the traffic signals. For instance, professionals or school going children need to spend their precious time on the road because of bottleneck traffic. Firstly, this problem can be talked significantly by constructing new flyovers, roads and by encouraging the use of public transportation. Secondly educating the public about car-pooling or promoting public transportation would be another great step to address the congestion. In addition, the crime rate is increased rapidly in urban areas. This is triggered by increasing unemployment and poverty. The government can control poverty by providing financial aid to the deprived community. Creating more job opportunities is another good and long term solution. Furthermore, the government should implement severe punishment for any sort of crime so that people think twice before committing any kind of crime. By these measures and by educating people, crime rate can be controlled to a great extent. Putting everything into consideration, even though cities are well developed, crime rate and traffic issues deteriorate the city living and these two problems occur mostly because of the increasing population in city areas. Decentralisation and development of rural areas could keep a balance between the numbers of population in rural and city areas and effective measures could be taken by government and citizens to address the negative effects which are caused due to the over population in urban areas.
Overpopulation and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects of it are major concerns in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
all around the globe. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
outcomes that the growing number of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
contributes and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
congestion and
rapidly
increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
are two major drastic effects of overpopulation. This essay portrays the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of aforementioned two issues and suggests relevant solutions.

Undeniably
, choking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the city life difficult. Industries, schools and hospitals
are rooted
in the city
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
. Everyday commuters spend hours after hours in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
signals.
For instance
, professionals or school going children need to spend their precious time on the road
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of bottleneck
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
.
Firstly
, this problem can
be talked
significantly
by constructing new flyovers, roads and by encouraging the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transportation.
Secondly
educating the public about car-pooling or promoting public transportation would be another great step to address the congestion.

In addition
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
is increased
rapidly
in urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
. This
is triggered
by increasing unemployment and poverty. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can control poverty by providing financial aid to the deprived community. Creating more job opportunities is another
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and long term solution.
Furthermore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should implement severe punishment for any sort of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
twice
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
committing any kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
. By these measures and by educating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
can
be controlled
to a great extent.

Putting everything into consideration,
even though
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well developed
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
issues deteriorate the city living and these two problems occur
mostly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
in city
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
.
Possible spelling mistake. 'Decentralisation' is British English.
Decentralisation
and development of rural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
a balance between the numbers of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
in rural and city
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
and effective measures could
be taken
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and citizens to address the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects which
are caused
due to the over
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
in urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Over population of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts