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Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before: it means putting old ideas together in new ways. v.1

Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before: it means putting old ideas together in new ways. v. 1
Last two decades surprisingly changed our lifestyles with technological improvements and advent of new devices such as smartphones, smart watches and 3D supporting smart televisions. But, unfortunately, succession rate is minimum if we count abortive inventions too. This essay is going to examine what genuine idea is and how should it needed to be created to become successive in today's standards. First of all, it is obvious that one of the most important flagships for mobile electronics device is "iPhone". This idea has sold millions around the world but the main thing behind its success is the ancestor of this phone which is "iPod". Although the first phone had so many problems, because of its capability of anything iPod can do and phone usage as a plus. This idea could not end up with success without previous trials of iPod project. Secondly, recently smart watches become prevalent and main idea why they become popular is because of its opulent look, ability to interact with other devices and clock ability. For example, smart watches could not be popular if we still need to use the regular watch for time management. Moreover, smart televisions with 3D support could not get much attention if it only supported 3D movies. Gladly, investors figured out that it is important to support what traditional televisions capable and as a result of this, many people become accustomed to these devices. On the other hand, many inventions vanished because of their lack of compatibility with our life, even though they were capable of great things. For example, one of the abortive ideas was to create new kind of smartphone which works as a personal computer. The idea was called as "Ubuntu" and they created products but due to the fact that many people already have a computer and happy with their smartphones, they didn't want to spend their savings on this device and as a result of this genuine device production halted. In conclusion, mixing previous ideas improves the probability of creating genuine products and its success rather than trying to create a completely new product.
Last two decades
surprisingly
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changed
our lifestyles with technological improvements and advent of new
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devices
such as smartphones,
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smart
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watches
and 3D supporting
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smart
televisions.
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But
, unfortunately, succession rate is minimum if we count abortive inventions too. This essay is going to examine what genuine
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idea
is and how should it needed to
be created
to
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become
successive in
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today
's standards.

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First of all
, it is obvious that one of the most
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important
flagships for mobile electronics
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device
is
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"
iPhone
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"
. This
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idea
has sold millions around the world
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but
the main thing behind its success is the ancestor of this phone which is
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iPod
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"
. Although the
first
phone had
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so
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many
problems,
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because
of its capability of anything iPod can do and phone usage as a plus. This
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idea
could not
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end
up with success without previous trials of iPod project.

Secondly
, recently
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smart
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watches
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become
prevalent and main
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idea
why they
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become
popular is
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because
of its opulent look, ability to interact with other
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devices
and clock ability.
For example
,
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smart
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watches
could not be popular if we
still
need to
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use
the regular
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watch
for time management.

Moreover
,
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smart
televisions with 3D support could not
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get
much attention if it
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only
supported 3D movies.
Gladly
, investors figured out that it is
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important
to support what traditional televisions capable and
as a result
of this,
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many
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people
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become
accustomed to these devices.

On the other hand
,
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many
inventions vanished
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because
of their lack of compatibility with our life,
even though
they were capable of great things.
For example
, one of the abortive
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ideas
was to create new kind of smartphone which works as a personal computer. The
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idea
was called
as
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"
Ubuntu
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"
and they created products
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but
due to the fact that
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many
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people
already have a computer and happy with their smartphones, they didn't want to spend their savings on this
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device
and
as a result
of this genuine
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device
production halted.

In conclusion
, mixing previous
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ideas
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improves
the probability of creating genuine products and its success
rather
than trying to create a completely new product.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before: it means putting old ideas together in new ways. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
348 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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