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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. v. 5
While it is often thought that e-learning is beneficial in this modern era as well as going to replace face-to-face learning process soon, others argue that the traditional educational system is unchangeable. In my opinion, I believe that e-learning will modify tradition of learning progress on upcoming years. On one hand people consider that e-Learning has so many benefits which are easier to attend the class, save the money and these benefits are replaceable with the learning process of today's life as well as I agree with it. In other words, people prefer the simple way in this novel life and e-learning is the system that people ought to use. For example, my college opened online courses recently because of only 25% attendance in the classroom. Furthermore, over-aged people can learn the instruction of teacher while they are in their home which is interesting. In Short, The society going to be beneficial for this system. On the other hand, many people mention that traditional education is the mechanism which is unchangeable for society development. To put it simply, many honourable person succeeded by this type of learning program so it is quite impossible to change because all the types of development of the Nation are adjusted with this traditional education. Even, people accept the learning method only for inspiration of Golden humans of nations all over the world. If traditional education replaced, the government cannot build the countries in the future. In conclusion, while people's opinions vary in many ways, I personally believe that e-learning is the method which is beneficial for both in learning method as well as upcoming days also.
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that e-learning is beneficial in this modern era
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learning
process
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soon
, others argue that the
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educational system is unchangeable. In my opinion, I believe that e-learning will modify tradition of
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learning
progress on upcoming years.

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people
consider that e-Learning has
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many
benefits which are easier to attend the
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class
, save the money and these benefits are replaceable with the
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learning
process of
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today
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as well
as I
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agree
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,
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people
prefer the simple way in this novel life and e-learning is the system that
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people
ought to
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.
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because
of
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only
25% attendance in the classroom.
Furthermore
, over-aged
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people
can learn the instruction of teacher while they are in their home which is interesting. In Short, The society going to be beneficial for this system.

On the other hand
,
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many
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mention that
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education is the mechanism which is unchangeable for society development. To put it
simply
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honourable
person succeeded by this type of
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learning
program
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so
it is quite impossible to
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change
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because
all the types of development of the Nation
are adjusted
with this
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traditional
education. Even,
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people
accept the
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learning
method
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only
for inspiration of Golden humans of nations all over the world. If
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traditional
education replaced, the
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government
cannot build the countries in the future.

In conclusion
, while
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people
's opinions vary in
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many
ways, I
personally
believe that e-learning is the method which is beneficial for both in
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learning
method
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as well as
upcoming days
also
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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