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many television news programmes show pictures of events in the news which people find upsetting. While television has a duty to report important news, it should not bring disturbing images into people’s homes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

many television news programmes show pictures of events in the news which people find upsetting. While television has a duty to report important news, it should not bring disturbing images into people’s homes. v. 1
Mas media play a vital role in making people aware of what's happing around the globe. Television news programmes are one of the key assets for the knowledge being delivered to households. I strongly abide by the fact that the news channels have a job and a duty to update the society with the latest stuff happening in the world, but some people find it disturbing watching certain scenes and pictures in the news report. In the forthcoming paragraphs i will shed some light on the topic along with my own views. Firstly, i believe that the mankind has the right to know what disturbances are being made all over the world with true facts and illustrations and this can only be done on a global level with the help of news reports. Talking about the violent images showed in the reports i adhere to the importance of showcasing people the level of cruelty or injustice a place or a particular society is up to. And this can be truly revealed with illustrations. No matter how disturbing the scenarios are it is the moral duty of every tv news programme to collect the evidences. On the other hand, I also understand that some people cannot see or experience such extent of volatile and vulnerable disturbing pics being showcased through the tv reports. And I think this is the situation where online assets can help. Stating that, we all know that the modern era is the period of easy access internet and all the news channels have the access to social media and even their own official application. The scenes that are panic creating should be shown blurred in the tv channels, but the description can be given if somebody wants to see these pictures voluntarily they can access the social platforms or the application. In a nutshell, i would recapitulate by stating that watching disturbing stuff and violent pictures is a task that should be done as a voluntary action and thus should not be shown publicly but saying that it should still be available for the people who wish to see that.
Mas media play a vital role in making
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people
aware of what's
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happing
around the globe. Television
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news
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programmes
are one of the key assets for the knowledge
being delivered
to households. I
strongly
abide by the fact that the
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news
channels have a job and a duty to update the society with the latest stuff happening in the world,
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but
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some
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people
find it
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disturbing
watching certain scenes and pictures in the
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news
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report
. In the forthcoming paragraphs
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i
will shed
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some
light on the topic along with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
views.

Firstly
,
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i
believe that the mankind has the right to know what disturbances are
being made
all over the world with true facts and illustrations and this can
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only
be done
on a global level with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of
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news
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reports
. Talking about the violent images
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showed
in the
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reports
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i
adhere to the importance of showcasing
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people
the level of cruelty or injustice a place or a particular society is up to. And this can be
truly
revealed with illustrations. No matter how
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disturbing
the scenarios are it is the moral duty of every
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tv
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news
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programme
to collect the evidences.

On the other hand
, I
also
understand that
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some
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people
cannot
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see
or experience such extent of volatile and vulnerable
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disturbing
pics
being showcased
through the
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tv
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reports
. And I
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think
this is the situation where online assets can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. Stating that, we all know that the modern era is the period of easy access internet and all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
channels have the access to social media and even their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
official application. The scenes that are panic creating should
be shown
blurred in the
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tv
channels,
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but
the description can be
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given
if somebody wants to
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see
these pictures
voluntarily
they can access the social platforms or the application.

In a nutshell,
Did you mean "I"?
i
would recapitulate by stating that watching
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disturbing
stuff and violent pictures is a task that should
be done
as a voluntary action and
thus
should not
be shown
publicly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
saying that it should
still
be available for the
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people
who wish to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay many television news programmes show pictures of events in the news which people find upsetting. While television has a duty to report important news, it should not bring disturbing images into people’s homes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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