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One of your friends is often late for events and appointments which makes other angry You would like to help your fiend What advice will you give your fiend to help avoid this problem in the future Use specific details and examples in your advice v.1

One of your friends is often late for events and appointments which makes other angry You would like to help your fiend What advice will you give your fiend to help avoid this problem in the future Use specific details and examples in your advice v. 1
The advert of the information age has bombarded the public with too much information, much of which has little connection with people’s daily life. In this sense, some believe reading news programs on TV is a waste of time. Personally, I completely disagree with this idea There were several reasons why being informed the latest event can still bring benefits to people. The first important reason is that. It is advisable to be aware of the current state of affairs for the general public, which is directly related to individual life. A typical example for this close relationship is what people should do in case of virus corona disease nowadays. Frequently reading the news reports, no matter in newspapers or on TV programs, citizens can be enabled to understand clearer the instructions and the bans of the authority, and thus can behave accordingly, without worrying to be lagged behind. The second noticeably prominent reason is that Those who work as scientists are always in need of updated information from news reports about various fields. These range from education to economics and health care. For instance, news about the current coronavirus has pushed researchers all over the world to compete 24/7 in inventing a vaccine against it. As a result, it can be argued that news is closely related to the outside world, whether common people or experts in the scientific world are taken into consideration. In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I strongly believe that, newspapers or TV programs are still significant in delivering news reports. As for how to take advantages of them, it depends on individuals”s judgment, rather than just an assertion of a waste of time.
The advert of the information age has bombarded the public with too much information, much of which has
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little
connection with
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people’s
daily life. In this sense,
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some
believe reading
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news
programs on TV is a waste of time.
Personally
, I completely disagree with this
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idea


There were several
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reasons
why
being informed
the latest
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event
can
still
bring benefits to
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people
. The
first
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important
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reason
is that. It is advisable to be aware of the
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current
state of affairs for the
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general public
, which is
directly
related to individual life. A typical example for this close relationship is what
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should do in case of virus corona disease nowadays.
Frequently
reading the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
reports, no matter in newspapers or on TV programs, citizens can
be enabled
to understand clearer the instructions and the bans of the authority, and
thus
can behave
accordingly
, without worrying to
be lagged
behind.

The second
noticeably
prominent
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reason
is that Those who work as scientists are always in need of updated information from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
reports about various fields. These range from education to economics and health care.
For instance
,
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news
about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
coronavirus has pushed researchers all over the world to compete 24/7 in inventing a vaccine against it.
As a result
, it can
be argued
that
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news
is
closely
related to the outside world, whether common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
or experts in the scientific world
are taken
into consideration.

In conclusion
, for the
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reasons
I mentioned above, I
strongly
believe that, newspapers or TV programs are
still
significant in delivering
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news
reports. As for how to take advantages of them, it depends on
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individuals”s
judgment,
rather
than
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just
an assertion of a waste of time.
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IELTS essay One of your friends is often late for events and appointments which makes other angry You would like to help your fiend What advice will you give your fiend to help avoid this problem in the future Use specific details and examples in your advice v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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