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Do you agree or disagree with this statement: A good sense of humor is one the most important human's quality. v.1

: A good sense of humor is one the most important human's quality. v. 1
It is believed that mixing with a number of people from different origins can actually help in bridging up the cultural gaps in between. I strongly advocate that tourism can bridge cultural gaps. First and foremost, meaningful travel promotes the connecting bridge. Tourism is a unique industry that boosts the unity between people of all different colours, backgrounds, and traditions. Besides, it also allows people to learn more about each individual country’s history and culture. Travellers can explore a new culture, learn another language, try to see the world through a different set of lenses and apply positive cultural traits to their lives. Take for example, If Koreans pay a visit to Vietnam, this will promote Vietnamese cultural exchange and build many entertainment places suitable for Korean tastes. Clearly, tourism increases international connections which can bring more business and cultural collaborations in the long term. In addition, it raises cross-cultural awareness for both local and tourist and builds bridges of understanding between cultures. Furthermore, tourism gives the locality a chance to show itself off and raise its profile in the world. On the other hand, there are a number of people who actually think negatively about the concept of tourism bridging up the cultural gaps. The more people a country invites within its borders each year, the more the possibility of bringing in tourists who do not honour the local traditions and customs. Sometimes, tourists do not respect local cultures, and will break certain unspoken codes of conduct that are held very highly by the indigenous people of a country. However, the benefits outweigh drawbacks. When a country has a lot of travellers visiting, there will be many commercial activities appropriate to the capitalization of tourists. Culturally speaking, tourism helps to build links between different people from all kinds of backgrounds and social standings. This then generates understanding amongst various types of people and can help to encourage lasting economic, political and social relationships. Taking everything into consideration, from my point of view, tourism is the way we connect with every region of the world, helping to develop the traditional identity of each country. Therefore, tourism actually can bridge the cultural gaps.
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is believed
that mixing with a number of
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people
from
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origins can actually
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help
in bridging up the
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cultural
gaps in between. I
strongly
advocate that
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tourism
can
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bridge
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cultural
gaps.

First
and foremost, meaningful travel promotes the connecting
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bridge
.
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Tourism
is a unique industry that boosts the unity between
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people
of all
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different
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colours
, backgrounds, and traditions.
Besides
, it
also
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allows
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people
to learn more about each individual
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country’s
history and
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culture
.
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Travellers
can explore a new
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culture
, learn another language, try to
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see
the world through a
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different
set of lenses and apply
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positive
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cultural
traits to their
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lives
. Take
for example
, If Koreans pay a visit to Vietnam, this will promote Vietnamese
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cultural
exchange and build
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many
entertainment places suitable for Korean tastes.
Clearly
,
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tourism
increases international connections which can bring more business and
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cultural
collaborations in the long term.
In addition
, it raises cross-cultural awareness for both local and
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tourist
and builds
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bridges
of understanding between
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cultures
.
Furthermore
,
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tourism
gives the locality a chance to
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show
itself off and raise its profile in the world.

On the other hand
, there are a number of
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people
who actually
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think
negatively
about the concept of
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tourism
bridging up the
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cultural
gaps. The more
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people
a
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country
invites within its borders each year, the more the possibility of bringing in
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tourists
who do not
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honour
the local traditions and customs.
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Sometimes
,
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tourists
do not respect local
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cultures
, and will break certain unspoken codes of conduct that
are held
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very
highly
by the indigenous
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people
of a
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country
.
However
, the benefits outweigh drawbacks. When a
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country
has
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a lot of
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travellers
visiting, there will be
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many
commercial activities appropriate to the capitalization of
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tourists
.
Culturally
speaking,
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tourism
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helps
to build links between
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different
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people
from all kinds of backgrounds and social standings. This then generates understanding amongst various types of
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people
and can
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help
to encourage lasting economic, political and social relationships.

Taking everything into consideration, from my point of view,
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tourism
is the way we connect with every region of the world, helping to develop the traditional identity of each
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country
.
Therefore
,
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tourism
actually can
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bridge
the
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cultural
gaps.
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IELTS essay : A good sense of humor is one the most important human's quality. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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