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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v.5

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 5
Modern advancements are replacing traditional communication between people. And the developer in how we form a bond with people around the worlds that I will discuss in this essay is really welcoming and hopeful. Many years before these days, we hardly transport our messages to a friend or a relative who are living so far, usually took more than 5 days to reach. However, the development of smartphone and other advanced tablets has an important role not just meaning in communication, but also creating a united society through in visual network. Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and more are significantly well-known and widely used to connect the world in a few second and create many social groups like IELTS study group which is helpful to learn and share wonderful lessons. Moreover, the relationship between nations has been tied by social media. Many global organisations like UNICEF are using this site to make a campaign or hold up many programmes for protecting, improving child's life and uniting them in many countries. In Vietnam, for example, FutureU are widely known for its aim, which is to help students improve their critical thinking and use their ideas to help the local society. Thank's for the help of the laptop and the internet, children from anywhere, even the remote area, can join the programmes. So again, we cannot deny how important is technology help us in these days. In conclusion, technology, although has many drawbacks we have not recognised yet, the extreme benefits of it are easy to find out and necessary. So it will be a positive development for our future.
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people
. And the developer in how we form a bond with
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people
around the worlds that I will discuss in this essay is
really
welcoming and hopeful.

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years
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before
these days, we hardly transport our messages to a friend or a relative who are living
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so
far,
usually
took more than 5 days to reach.
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, the development of smartphone and other advanced tablets has an
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important
role not
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just
meaning in communication,
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but
also
creating a united society through in visual network. Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and more are
significantly
well-known and
widely
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used
to connect the world in a
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and create
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many
social groups like IELTS study group which is helpful to learn and share wonderful lessons.

Moreover
, the relationship between nations has
been tied
by social media.
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Many
global
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organisations
like UNICEF are using this site to
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make
a campaign or hold up
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many
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programmes
for protecting, improving child's life and uniting them in
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many
countries. In Vietnam,
for example
,
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FutureU
are
widely
known for its aim, which is to
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help
students
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improve
their critical thinking and
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use
their
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ideas
to
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help
the local society.
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Thank's
for the
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help
of the laptop and the internet, children from anywhere, even the remote area, can
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join
the
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programmes
.
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So
again, we cannot deny how
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important
is technology
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help
us in these days.

In conclusion
, technology, although has
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many
drawbacks we have not
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recognised
yet
, the extreme benefits of it are easy to find out and necessary.
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So
it will be a
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positive
development for our future.
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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