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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v.15

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 15
In the contemporary era, the standard of living is declining among those people living in major cities. There are a number of causes for this situation, but certain measures could be taken to alleviate this problem. This essay will discuss the causes and suggest viable solution. There are several causes for this position. The main one is that, people are working in different companies with more pressure to improve their life cycle, but this will only lead to major health issues such as stress, hypertension and heart related diseases. In addition to that people are consuming more unhealthy processed foods nowadays. The major contributing companies are KFC, Mc Donalds, Burger king is very popular among the busiest people. As a result, medical council of London issue a statement that people with above mentioned problems surge in mortality rate Various possible courses of action could be taken to tackle the above. In the first place, the government should launch nationwide campaign to raise public awareness about the importance of quality life in the current scenario. For instance, companies should arrange for alternative work pattern and flexible working time. Another way forward could be minister of health should advertise in the televisions and other mass media's about the obesity which affects the younger generation both physically and mentally. The Asian countries are prime examples where 60% to 80% of people affected by obesity. In fact, this is medically proved by many countries. In conclusion, various factors lead to the problems related to growth quality, but this situation can be addressed by launch of health campaign and implementation of effective regulations on oily foods. Given the situation, it is recommended that the necessary steps to be taken in order to ensure that the life quality of people in the country improves.
In the contemporary era, the standard of living is declining among those
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people
living in major cities. There are a number of causes for this situation,
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but
certain measures could
be taken
to alleviate this problem. This essay will discuss the causes and suggest viable solution.

There are several causes for this position. The main one is that,
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people
are working in
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different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
with more pressure to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their life cycle,
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but
this will
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only
lead to major health issues such as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
, hypertension and heart related diseases.
In addition
to that
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people
are consuming more unhealthy processed foods nowadays. The major contributing
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companies
are KFC,
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Mc
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Donalds
,
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Burger king
is
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very
popular among the busiest
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people
.
As a result
, medical council of London issue a statement that
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people
with above mentioned problems surge in mortality
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rate


Various possible courses of action could
be taken
to tackle the above. In the
first
place, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should launch nationwide campaign to raise public awareness about the importance of quality life in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
scenario.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
should arrange for alternative work pattern and flexible working time. Another way forward could be
Consider using a past participle here: "ministered".
minister
of health should advertise in the televisions and other mass media's about the obesity which affects the younger generation both
physically
and mentally. The Asian countries are prime examples where 60% to 80% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by obesity. In fact, this is
medically
proved by
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many
countries.

In conclusion
, various factors lead to the problems related to growth quality,
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but
this situation can
be addressed
by launch of health campaign and implementation of effective regulations on oily foods.
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Given
the situation, it
is recommended
that the necessary steps to
be taken
in order to ensure that the life quality of
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people
in the country
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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