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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v.3

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 3
In recent decades, technology has improved prominently and has changed our way of lives in different aspects such as our interactions. Considering how technology affected people’s relationships establish whether or not this is a beneficial change. As people are very busy with their professions nowadays and have limited time to socialize with their friends, they feel lonely. The situation is more disappointing for those busy employees who are surrounded with their duties and have not enough time to meet new people and start a romantic relationship. Social media and different dating applications ease making connections for these people; it takes little time to start online conversation with who they think is a good match for them. These online talks usually lead to in-person coffee or dinner dating. However, the problem is that the prevalence of social media affected the quality time among families. For instance, teenagers tend to spend more time on social media with their online friends instead of their parents. Thanks to the technology, relationships last over time and distance. In pre digital days, it was difficult for people to stay connected after graduation from school or moving to other cities. These days, individuals are connected with each other through Facebook, Instagram, Skype and other messenger applications. Although, we should not neglect the undeniable negative effects of mentioned applications on users particularly on teenagers. Sometimes people compare their own life with the uploaded pictures of best and happiest moments of others and feel disappointed about their selves. In conclusion, the prevalence of technology will help people to socialize and keep their relationships. However, this reliance on technology will be like a double-edge sword, as they can affect family ties and make people feel worst about their lives. As long as individuals manage their time and are aware of life’s realities, technology will be favorable.
In recent decades,
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has
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our way of
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in
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different
aspects such as our interactions. Considering how
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technology
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affected
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people’s
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relationships
establish
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whether or not
this is a beneficial
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change
.

As
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people
are
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very
busy with their professions nowadays and have limited
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time
to socialize with their friends, they feel lonely. The situation is more disappointing for those busy employees who
are surrounded
with their duties and have not
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enough
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time
to
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meet
new
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people
and
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start
a romantic
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relationship
. Social media and
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different
dating applications
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ease
making connections for these
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people
; it takes
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little
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time
to
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start
online conversation with
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who
they
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think
is a
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good
match for them. These online talks
usually
lead to in-person coffee or dinner dating.
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, the problem is that the prevalence of social media
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affected
the quality
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time
among families.
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,
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teenagers
tend to spend more
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time
on social media with their online friends
instead
of their parents.

Thanks to the
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technology
,
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relationships
last over
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time
and distance. In
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pre
digital days, it was difficult for
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people
to stay connected after graduation from school or moving to
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other
cities. These days, individuals
are connected
with each
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other
through Facebook, Instagram, Skype and
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other
messenger applications.
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Although
, we should not neglect the undeniable
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negative
effects of mentioned applications on users
particularly
on
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teenagers
.
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Sometimes
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people
compare their
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own
life with the uploaded pictures of best and happiest moments of others and feel disappointed about their selves.

In conclusion
, the prevalence of
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technology
will
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help
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people
to socialize and
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keep
their
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relationships
.
However
, this reliance on
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technology
will be like a double-edge sword, as they can affect family ties and
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make
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people
feel worst about their
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lives
. As long as individuals manage their
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time
and are aware of life’s realities,
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technology
will be favorable.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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