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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v.43

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v. 43
A true relationship between two people requires face to face communication and time to truly get to know each other. Regardless of what humans think, all individuals admire the feeling of being wanted even if it’s a lie. The digital world has created the sense that it is passable to be who anyone wishes to be online. However, I believe that the way people know each other online and the type of relationships they make virtually have changed and for the worse. Instead of being a true friend to the people around each other, most are being turned inward, forgetting the true definition of a friend. Human beings have feelings and they feel broken at times and do not always smile but the Internet only shows one's happy moments keeping one from fully being known. The types of friendships people make these days are quick and short-lasting. In real life friendship, people see each other at one’s best and worst time and remain there for one another. This can never be compared to a social network friendship. One can only get to know someone by spending time together for the reason that the Internet cannot replace shared experience and personal communication. However, due to the Internet, people can make friends anywhere from the world which was quite impossible in the past era. Finding school and college friends and getting in touch with them is an advantage that the Internet offers to us. However, true friendship is not possible if two people do not spend time together, share their common interests, talks a lot and help each other both in good and bad times. Rightfully, life is meant to be lived and have many physical experiences, bonding with another person’s physical presence. Instead of being a true friend to the people around each other, they are spending time online to make friends. This is, in my opinion, is a negative aspect of the digital era. In conclusion, making friends beyond boundaries and getting in touch with childhood friends could be the advantages of the digital era but the way we are becoming dependent on the technology and the way we are pretending to maintain our friendship online have negative consequences on our personal, moral and social aspects.
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true
relationship between two
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people
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requires
face to face communication and
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time
to
truly
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get
to know each
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other
. Regardless of what humans
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think
, all individuals admire the feeling of
being wanted
even if it’s a lie. The digital world has created the sense that it is passable to be who anyone wishes to be
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online
.
However
, I believe that the way
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people
know each
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other
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online
and the type of relationships they
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make
virtually
have
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changed
and for the worse.

Instead
of being a
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true
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friend
to the
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people
around each
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other
, most are
being turned
inward, forgetting the
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true
definition of a
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friend
. Human beings have
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feelings and
they feel broken at
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times
and do not always smile
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but
the Internet
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only
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shows
one's happy moments keeping one from
fully
being known
. The types of
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friendships
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people
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make
these days are quick and short-lasting. In real life
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friendship
,
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people
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see
each
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other
at one’s best and worst
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time
and remain there for one another. This can never
be compared
to a social network
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friendship
. One can
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only
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get
to know someone by spending
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time
together for the reason that the Internet cannot replace shared experience and personal communication.
However
, due to the Internet,
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people
can
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make
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friends
anywhere from the world which was quite impossible in the past era. Finding school and college
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friends
and getting in touch with them is an advantage that the Internet offers to us.
However
,
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true
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friendship
is not possible if two
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people
do not spend
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time
together, share their common interests, talks a lot and
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help
each
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other
both in
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good
and
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bad
times.

Rightfully
, life
is meant
to be
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lived
and have
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many
physical experiences, bonding with another person’s physical presence.
Instead
of being a
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true
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friend
to the
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people
around each
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other
, they are spending
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time
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online
to
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make
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friends
. This is, in my opinion, is a
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negative
aspect of the digital era.

In conclusion
, making
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friends
beyond boundaries and getting in touch with childhood
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friends
could be the advantages of the digital era
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but
the way we are becoming dependent on the technology and the way we are pretending to maintain our
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friendship
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online
have
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negative
consequences on our personal, moral and social aspects.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v. 43

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
376 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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