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Task 2 Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology In what ways has has technology affected the types of relationships people make Has this become a positive or negativedevelopment Give reasons for your answer a v.2

Task 2 Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology In what ways has has technology affected the types of relationships people make Has this become a positive or negativedevelopment 2
Such is the technology revolution, particularly the Internet that the human interaction has changed significantly. Though the new type of communication has several disadvantages, I believe that its benefits outweigh those drawbacks. It is an inevitable fact that the technology has made dramatic influence on the way people communicate with each other. Firstly, with the help of the Internet, there is a shift from letters to texts or mails. Precisely, in the early times, people used to keep in touch with each other by exchanging letters, however, within a few seconds for a text or a mail being transferred, they can receive a message from others. Moreover, people nowadays do not have to hangout to face-to-face talking, as they are able to see each other via video call or Skype. An additional factor is that the social network which enable people to make friends, to share their stories or to communicate with their friends. Nevertheless, the effect of the technology on human relationship has been the controversial issue recently. On the one hand, some people argue that the new relationship has become negative development which has led to the lack of real interaction. Technology addicts, for instance, are always checking their phones, texting, chatting, surfing the websites while hanging out with their friends and hardly say a word. In the other hand, a large number of people believe that the development of technology has provided them numerous benefits. If it is not for the invention of texts and mails, they would not have saved their time in writing letters, sending them to the post office and waiting for response. Thus, by far the greatest advantages of the Internet is that it helps people who do not have a chance to meet each other to face talking. As an example, abroad students are capable of seeing and talking to their parents via Skype and this encourages them from being homesick. In conclusion, the technology has changed the way in which people interact with each other. There are convincing arguments both for and against this new type of relationship, however, I think that this has become a positive development.
Such is the
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revolution,
particularly
the Internet that the human interaction has
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changed
significantly
. Though the new type of communication has several disadvantages, I believe that its benefits outweigh those drawbacks.

It is an inevitable fact that the
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technology
has made dramatic influence on the way
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people
communicate with each
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other
.
Firstly
, with the
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help
of the Internet, there is a shift from letters to texts or mails.
Precisely
, in the early times,
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people
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used
to
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keep
in touch with each
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other
by exchanging letters,
however
, within a few seconds for a text or a mail
being transferred
, they can receive a message from others.
Moreover
,
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people
nowadays do not have
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to hangout
to face-to-face talking, as they are able to
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see
each
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other
via video call or Skype. An additional factor is that the social network which enable
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people
to
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make
friends, to share their stories or to communicate with their friends.

Nevertheless
, the effect of the
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technology
on human relationship has been the controversial issue recently. On the one hand,
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some
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people
argue that the new relationship has become
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negative
development which has led to the lack of real interaction.
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Technology
addicts,
for instance
, are always checking their phones, texting, chatting, surfing the websites while hanging out with their friends and hardly say a word. In the
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other
hand,
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a large number of
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people
believe that the development of
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technology
has provided them numerous benefits. If it is not for the invention of texts and mails, they would not have saved their time in writing letters, sending them to the post office and waiting for response.
Thus
, by far the greatest advantages of the Internet is that it
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helps
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people
who do not have a chance to
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meet
each
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other
to face talking. As an example, abroad students are capable of seeing and talking to their parents via Skype and this encourages them from being homesick.

In conclusion
, the
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technology
has
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changed
the way in which
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people
interact with each
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other
. There are convincing arguments both for and against this new type of relationship,
however
, I
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think
that this has become a
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positive
development.
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IELTS essay Task 2 Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology In what ways has has technology affected the types of relationships people make Has this become a positive or negativedevelopment 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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