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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v.44

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v. 44
It is true that technology in recent years has altered the path that people communicate with each other. There are many ways that technology affects our relationships, and in my opinion, this is a beneficial development. To begin with, the most obvious transformation in people relationships is how they communicate with each other. By this, I mean that the Internet has converted the world into a small village and nowadays people around the world can reach each other easily and rapidly. For example, a friend who lives in the UK can chat and talk with their friends in China using a mobile phone or social network. Another field in which technology affects our life is the way that people make friends. In other words, it has been observed that these days we can make friends from all nationalities without any effort or travel and this helps with culture interchange and help people who suffer. In my thought, this is a positive impact on the community for two reasons. Firstly, human life has become more convenient, this provides people with more opportunity to spend their leisure time with their kin. For instance, with the Internet, we can shop and work from our dwelling house without going outside anymore. Secondly, travel around the globe has become usable and cheap. As a result, people visiting each other and spend a lot of time together hence more connected society emerges. To conclude, as we have found out there is no easy
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people
communicate with each
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other
. There are
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many
ways that technology affects our relationships, and in my opinion, this is a beneficial development.

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begin
with, the most obvious transformation in
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people
relationships is how they communicate with each
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other
. By this, I mean that the Internet has converted the world into a
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small
village and nowadays
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people
around the world can reach each
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other
easily
and
rapidly
.
For example
, a
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friend
who
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lives
in the UK can chat and talk with their
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friends
in China using a mobile phone or social network.

Another field in which technology affects our life is the way that
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people
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make
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friends
. In
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other
words, it has
been observed
that these days we can
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make
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friends
from all nationalities without any effort or travel and this
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helps
with culture interchange and
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help
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people
who suffer.

In my
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thought
, this is a
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positive
impact on the community for two reasons.
Firstly
, human life has become more convenient, this provides
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people
with more opportunity to spend their leisure time with their kin.
For instance
, with the Internet, we can shop and work from our dwelling
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house
without going outside anymore.
Secondly
, travel around the globe has become usable and
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cheap
.
As a result
,
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people
visiting each
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other
and spend
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a lot of
time together
hence
more connected society emerges.

To conclude
, as we have found out there is no easy
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v. 44

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
246 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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