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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v.42

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v. 42
There is no doubt that many things had changed in the last few decades; some changes are for betterment and some changes are for worse. One of the fields which were greatly affected by the advent of technology is the way of interaction and communication. Without any doubt, technology has changed the way we lead our lives and these changes are prominent over the last decade. There are several improvements in life due to the positive effects of technology and there are some negative impacts as well. One area that has dramatically changed is the way we communicate and maintain our relationship nowadays. And in my opinion, technology has positively affected our communication and the way we make relationships and maintain it. Despite some negative effects, most of us enjoy the positive things the technology has bought for us. In the past, the ways of interaction were very limited. Unleash your imagination; if you want to speak with your friend, you would have to go directly to his house or send him a message which may take a few days to get a response. I completely believe that technology has a great tangible effect on our communication. Nowadays, it's very easy to interact with your relatives -and even with the government and organisations- either by emails, mobiles, chatting, etc. and I think that this has improved the relationships and enhanced it. We no longer need to visit a relative or friend to get updates. Alternatively, we can let them know our updates instantly. Besides personal communications, official and business communications have become easier. Email campaign offers a good marketing opportunity for business owners and people can complain about a certain thing using emails without exposing their identity. Not all of the people have the availability of technology and they still use the old form of communication. People now can deceive others using identity theft and fraud identity. The personal touch of communication like handwritten letters, face-to-face communications were more effective in some cases. Like meeting your friend is still more important than just writing him an email. We make so many friends via chatting or social networking which would not have been possible without the advancement of technology and its contribution to the communication. Cell phones, emails and social networking have enhanced the way of communicating and we can talk to anyone with a minimum cost. It's now not unusual to prepare for a visit and even several visits to your relatives and friends on the same day, while in the past this may have taken several weeks or months. To conclude, despite all that, I still see some failings in the development of the means of interaction. For instance, the very high cost each person spends every day on communication. Another defect, many elder people are not accustomed to this modern technology. But that doesn't have a great effect on the positive role technology has made in the field of interaction between people and I think these defects are very easy to be solved.
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things had
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in the last few decades;
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some
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changes
are for betterment and
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some
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are for worse. One of the fields which were
greatly
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affected
by the advent of
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technology
is the way of
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interaction
and communication.

Without any doubt,
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technology
has
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changed
the way we lead our
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lives
and these
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changes
are prominent over the last decade. There are several improvements in life due to the
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positive
effects of
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technology
and there are
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some
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negative
impacts
as well
. One area that has
dramatically
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changed
is the way we communicate and maintain our relationship nowadays. And in my opinion,
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technology
has
positively
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affected
our
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communication
and the way we
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make
relationships and maintain it. Despite
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some
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negative
effects, most of us enjoy the
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positive
things the
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technology
has
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bought
for us. In the past, the ways of
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interaction
were
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very
limited. Unleash your imagination; if you want to speak with your
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friend
, you would
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have to
go
directly
to his
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house
or
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send
him a message which may take a few days to
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get
a response. I completely believe that
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technology
has a great tangible
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effect
on our
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communication
. Nowadays, it's
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very
easy to interact with your relatives -and even with the
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government
and
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organisations
- either by emails, mobiles, chatting, etc. and I
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think
that this has
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improved
the relationships and enhanced it.

We no longer need to visit a relative or
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friend
to
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get
updates.
Alternatively
, we can
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let
them know our updates
instantly
.
Besides
personal communications, official and business communications have become easier. Email campaign offers a
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good
marketing opportunity for business owners and
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people
can complain about a certain thing using emails without exposing their identity. Not
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all of the
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people
have the availability of
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technology and
they
still
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use
the
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old
form of
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communication
.
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People
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now
can deceive others using identity theft and fraud identity. The personal touch of
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communication
like handwritten letters, face-to-face communications were more effective in
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some
cases. Like meeting your
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friend
is
still
more
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important
than
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just
writing him an email.

We
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make
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so
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many
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friends
via chatting or social networking which would not have been possible without the advancement of
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technology
and its contribution to the
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communication
. Cell phones, emails and social networking have enhanced the way of
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communicating and
we can talk to anyone with a minimum cost. It's
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now
not unusual to prepare for a visit and even several visits to your relatives and
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friends
on the same day, while in the past this may have taken several weeks or months.

To conclude
, despite all that, I
still
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see
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some
failings in the development of the means of
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interaction
.
For instance
, the
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very
high cost each person spends every day on
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communication
. Another defect,
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elder
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people
are not accustomed to this modern
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technology
.
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But
that doesn't have a great
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effect
on the
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positive
role
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technology
has made in the field of
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interaction
between
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people
and I
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think
these defects are
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very
easy to
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.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. v. 42

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
505 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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