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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v.33

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 33
Educational settings aim to prepare students for the real world. In the modern era, language acquisition is more crucial than ever. It is thought by many specialists that children gain more benefits when they start to learn a new language in primary education rather than secondary education. In my opinion, children learn everything the best at younger ages and, thereby, it is more advantageous for them to study a different tongue at primary school. Children have an intelligent mind which takes in all knowledge about life. Their brain functions almost ten times more rapidly than an average adult. In other words, as we age, our capacity and ability to think and understand decrease, unfortunately. Therefore, although few years will not contribute an enormous change in a child's life and capacity, it is beneficial for them to begin any education as early as possible. For example, a survey conducted in recent years suggests that, children are more successful at speaking a foreign tongue when they are looked after by a multilingual (or bilingual) caregiver. Some people argue that obtaining language skills at a very young age might lead to destroying the culture and traditional values. It is true that our native tongue is an important element of our traditions. Thus, it is a key to independence of a state. However, acquiring more than one will not result in diminishing of the culture. For example, some countries have more than one official language, and the natives are not complaining about any disappearance of local habits and traditions. Moreover, we live in an era in which information is the power. In conclusion, despite learning does not require a specific age, I believe that it benefits to learners much more when they are introduced to the subject at early ages because the mind is more productive. Practising another country grammar and vocabulary is insufficient to abolish our valuable customs whereas it empowers us.
Educational settings aim to prepare students for the real world. In the modern era,
language
acquisition is more crucial than ever. It is
thought
by
many
specialists that children gain more benefits when they
start
to learn a new
language
in primary education
rather
than secondary education. In my opinion, children learn everything the best at younger
ages
and, thereby, it is more advantageous for them to study a
different
tongue at primary school.

Children have an intelligent mind which takes in all knowledge about life. Their brain functions almost ten times more
rapidly
than an average adult.
In other words
, as we
age
, our capacity and ability to
think
and understand decrease, unfortunately.
Therefore
, although few years will not contribute an enormous
change
in a child's life and capacity, it is beneficial for them to
begin
any education as early as possible.
For example
, a survey conducted in recent years suggests that, children are more successful at speaking a foreign tongue when they
are looked
after by a multilingual (or bilingual) caregiver.

Some
people
argue that obtaining
language
skills
at a
very
young
age
might lead to destroying the culture and traditional values. It is true that our native tongue is an
important
element of our traditions.
Thus
, it is a key to independence of a state.
However
, acquiring more than one will not result in diminishing of the culture.
For example
,
some
countries have more than one official
language
, and the natives are not complaining about any disappearance of local habits and traditions.
Moreover
, we
live
in an era in which information is the power.

In conclusion
, despite learning does not require a specific
age
, I believe that it benefits to learners much more when they
are introduced
to the subject at early
ages
because
the mind is more productive.
Practising
another country grammar and vocabulary is insufficient to abolish our valuable customs whereas it empowers us.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 33

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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