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Nowadays the trend of eating ready made food is increasing. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages. v.1

Nowadays the trend of eating ready made food is increasing. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages. v. 1
Food is an integral part of the human body and two types of meal is prevalent all over the world. However, in the contemporary era, the demand of junk cuisine has increased significantly because of a sedentary lifestyle. This essay will argue that the demerits of it outweigh the merits. There are multifarious drawbacks of frozen cuisines. The gigantic disadvantages are that canned cuisine contains a significant amount of fat and oil, which put an adverse effect on people's health and they become a victim of several ailments. According to a survey, a majority of youngsters are suffering from obesity and blood pressure because of consumption of fast food stuff. Moreover, canned feed is made to the individuals lazy as they do not prefer to cook breakfast, lunch and dinner at home and like to eat outside, which leads to become lazy. Moreover, it puts a bad effect in relation. To illustrate, in an ancient years, people are meals together that cooked at home and shared their feelings with each other, which helps to make the bond of relation is stronger, whereas nowadays eating ready made cuisines has become popular among the public and they have not time to spend with their family due to their relationship is easily broken. However, despite having disadvantages, it has also a benefit that in these days people are workaholic and they have become exhausted after work. They have not enough stamina to prepare bread at home. So, junk foodstuff helps to reduce the burden of the populace. In conclusion, it is clear that although junk foodstuff is harmful for people's body and relationship, yet it is helpful for the workaholic.
Food is an integral part of the human body and two types of meal is prevalent all over the world.
However
, in the contemporary era, the demand of junk
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cuisine
has increased
significantly
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because
of a sedentary lifestyle. This essay will argue that the demerits of it outweigh the merits.

There are multifarious drawbacks of frozen
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cuisines
. The gigantic disadvantages are that canned
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cuisine
contains a significant amount of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
and oil, which put an adverse effect on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's
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health and
they
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become
a victim of several ailments. According to a survey, a majority of youngsters are suffering from obesity and blood pressure
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because
of consumption of
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fast
food stuff.
Moreover
, canned feed
is made
to the individuals lazy as they do not prefer to cook breakfast, lunch and dinner at home and like to eat outside, which leads to
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become
lazy.

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Moreover
, it puts a
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bad
effect in relation. To illustrate, in an ancient
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years
,
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people
are meals together that cooked at home and shared their feelings with each other, which
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helps
to
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make
the bond of relation is stronger, whereas nowadays eating
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ready made
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cuisines
has
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become
popular among the
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public and
they have not time to spend with their family due to their relationship is
easily
broken.

However
, despite having disadvantages, it has
also
a benefit that in these days
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are
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workaholic and
they have
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become
exhausted after work. They have not
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enough
stamina to prepare bread at home.
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So
, junk foodstuff
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helps
to
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reduce
the burden of the populace.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that although junk foodstuff is harmful for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's body and relationship,
yet
it is helpful for the workaholic.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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7Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays the trend of eating ready made food is increasing. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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