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Nowadays shops have extended opening hours almost every day of the week in many countries. Is it a positive or negative development for shoppers and local community? v.3

Nowadays shops have extended opening hours almost every day of the week in many countries. Is it a positive or negative development for shoppers and local community? v. 3
< span style=" font-size: 19. 36px; " > These days in many part of the world the shops has been opened for longer hours, almost all around the week. Although it may have few adverse effects on the personnel life of the owner, but I assert that overall it will be beneficial for both owner and society. To begin with, considering the advantages of long opening hours for the shop owners. The predominant benefit is increase in the profitability. If opening hours of any outlet will increase it will definitely add more income for the owner, because sale will boost. Due to increased working hours in almost all the arenas and profile of jobs, people usually get free in late hours, so they can easily purchase the things according to their convenient timings as they will find the shop open. apart from this, shoppers will also be compete with their rivals. In modern time there is perfect competition for all the products and commodities, so seller who will meet the demand in better way can only survive in this competitive world. Extended opening hours will definitely help to cater the customer need more efficiently. Moving further, this increase in opening timings ha significant importance for the community growth. As seller profit will grow they will pay more tax to the government, which can be used by the local authorities for various community development activities. Government plan the budget for every financial year and allot expenditure to different areas according to the income received from different sources and tax is one of the major source of income. Another positive area is increase in the employee opportunities, more people will be recruited by the shoppers if they want to run for longer time. For example, employee are working in shifts, so many will be able to find the job and living standard will grow. In conclusion, opening hours of the retail outlets are increasing in current years. Unequivocally it is helping the community to develop in many ways and leading the economy to grow. Owner are also earning more and able to overall the competition. < /span> < br>
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many part
of the world the shops has
been opened
for longer
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hours
, almost all around the week. Although it may have few adverse effects on the personnel life of the
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owner
,
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but
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overall
it will be beneficial for both
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owner
and society.

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begin
with, considering the advantages of long opening
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hours
for the shop
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owners
. The predominant benefit is
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increase
in the profitability. If opening
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hours
of any outlet will
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increase
it will definitely
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add
more income for the
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owner
,
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because
sale will boost. Due to increased working
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hours
in almost all the arenas and profile of jobs,
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people
usually
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get
free in late
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hours
,
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so
they can
easily
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purchase
the things according to their convenient timings as they will find the shop open.
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apart
from this, shoppers will
also
be
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compete
with their rivals. In modern time there is perfect competition for all the products and commodities,
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so
seller who will
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meet
the demand in better way can
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only
survive in this competitive world. Extended opening
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hours
will definitely
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help
to cater the customer need more
efficiently
.

Moving
further
, this
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increase
in opening timings ha significant importance for the community growth. As seller profit will grow they will pay more tax to the
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government
, which can be
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used
by the local authorities for various community development activities.
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Government
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plan
the budget for every financial year and allot expenditure to
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different
areas according to the income received from
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different
sources and tax is one of the major source of income. Another
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positive
area is
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increase
in the employee opportunities, more
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people
will
be recruited
by the shoppers if they want to run for longer time.
For example
, employee are working in shifts,
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so
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many
will be able to find the job and living standard will grow.

In conclusion
, opening
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hours
of the retail outlets are increasing in
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current
years.
Unequivocally
it is helping the community to develop in
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many
ways and leading the economy to grow.
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Owner
are
also
earning more and able to
overall
the competition.
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IELTS essay Nowadays shops have extended opening hours almost every day of the week in many countries. Is it a positive or negative development for shoppers and local community? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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