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Nowadays people live in the society where consumer goods are relatively cheaper to buy. Do you think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v.2

Nowadays people live in the society where consumer goods are relatively cheaper to buy. Do you think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v. 2
Gone were the days, when only wealthy people can afford to buy electronics and new clothes every other month, but with the disposable income everyone can buy nowadays. In recent times consumer goods are easily affordable. This essay will discuss does its merits outweigh demerits. To embark on, a decade ago due to limited resources as well as income hardly everyone can buy the consumer goods only rich people can afford it. To illustrate, 10 years ago wealthy people has the phone and electronic gadgets, but still they can't change it as often as they now can even after a month or so. For example, a study shows that now every 2nd house in the world has smartphones and t. v at their home. Thus, cheaper consumer good has made somehow everyone equal in this social status and made peoples' life easy as communication is being made easy now anyone can talk with each even at distant. Although, cheap goods has brought lots of benefits, but still it has great impact on the environment with the disposable income and the arrival of new gadgets everyday has a bad impact on the atmosphere. For instance, every month there is a new arrival of product hits the market, which makes the people buy more and which create the problem of landfills everywhere. After a certain period these resources will diminish if we will not take care of this thing now. Therefore, excessive production lead to more litter. In a nutshell, cheap goods are a beneficial bit to some extent we must stop producing unnecessary goods and consumptions as it is causing great damage to earth otherwise it will be too late.
Gone were the days, when
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wealthy
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people
can afford to
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buy
electronics and new clothes every other month,
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but
with the disposable income everyone can
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buy
nowadays. In recent times consumer
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goods
are
easily
affordable. This essay will discuss does its merits outweigh demerits.

To embark on, a decade ago due to limited resources
as well
as income hardly everyone can
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buy
the consumer
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goods
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only
rich
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people
can afford it. To illustrate, 10 years ago wealthy
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people
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the phone and electronic gadgets,
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but
still
they can't
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change
it as
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as they
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can even after a month or
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.
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, a study
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that
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every 2nd
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house
in the world has smartphones and t. v at their home.
Thus
, cheaper consumer
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good
has made somehow everyone equal in this social status and made peoples' life easy as communication is
being made
easy
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now
anyone can talk with each even at distant.

Although,
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cheap
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goods
has brought lots of benefits,
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still
it has great impact on the environment with the disposable income and the arrival of new gadgets
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everyday
has a
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impact on the atmosphere.
For instance
, every month there is a new arrival of product hits the market, which
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makes
the
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people
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buy
more and which create the problem of landfills everywhere. After a certain period these resources will diminish if we will not take care of this thing
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now
.
Therefore
, excessive production lead to
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more litter
.

In a nutshell,
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cheap
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goods
are a beneficial bit to
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some
extent we
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must
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stop
producing unnecessary
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goods
and
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consumptions
as it is causing great damage to earth
otherwise
it will be too late.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays people live in the society where consumer goods are relatively cheaper to buy. Do you think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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