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Nowadays people are more willing to help the people who they don't know (For example, giving food and clothes to the people who need them) than they were in the past. v.1

Nowadays people are more willing to help the people who they don't know (For example, giving food and clothes to the people who need them) than they were in the past. v. 1
Nowadays, the use of technology and its alliance with environmental topics, such as climate change, have gained public interest. While some people support the idea that new technologies are actually increasing waste and consumption of Earth's natural resources, I believe the use of modern approaches, such as the internet and smartphones, can actually help our society overcome the challenges our planet is facing. The deployment of smart appliances, connected TVs, virtual assistants and so on in our routine have been changing the way most of us live. Using technologies such as machine learning, computers can analyse our habits and predict our behaviour. This approach delivers a more personalized and efficient experience to every person, therefore, reducing the likelihood of energy being poorly used. For example, it is now common for houses to have thermostats which connect to smartphones and identify the right time to turn itself on or off. That sort of energy management, when applied to millions of houses across many countries, can deliver substantial savings on electricity bill, thus, bringing down the use of natural resources. Furthermore, technology also can help in a more indirect way; by connecting many social groups together through social networks, it can create a greater sense of community and help spread ideas at a faster pace. There are many environmental movements which have a global impact thanks to the internet. For example, many countries come together on an annual basis to celebrate "Earth Day", shutting down public (and private) buildings' illumination to reduce their carbon footprint. Moreover, it has become quite common to see people share on their social profiles things such as photos and videos about how they recycle their house's waste, which broadens the range of persons that get the message about the need for better preservation of nature. In conclusion, the use of technology on our daily lives can certainly improve the way we consume services and products, as well as spread environmental ideas on a global scale to reach as many people as possible. I support the continual development of new products that take into consideration how each person behaves, and uses that data to tailor the delivery of an energy optimized experience.
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our society overcome the challenges our planet is facing.

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on in our routine have been changing the way most of us
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of natural resources.

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social groups together through social networks, it can create a greater sense of community and
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spread
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environmental movements which have a global impact thanks to the internet.
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countries
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Earth Day
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, shutting down public (and private) buildings' illumination to
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their carbon footprint.
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's waste, which broadens the range of persons that
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the message about the need for better preservation of nature.

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on a global scale to reach as
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as possible. I support the continual development of new products that take into consideration how each person behaves, and
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that data to tailor the delivery of an energy optimized experience.
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IELTS essay Nowadays people are more willing to help the people who they don't know (For example, giving food and clothes to the people who need them) than they were in the past. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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