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do you agree or disagree? people nowadays are more willing to help other people (giving food or clothing) than in the past or not. v.20

people nowadays are more willing to help other people (giving food or clothing) than in the past or not. v. 20
Some People View teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which could be avoided. Discuss both views and give your opinion. There is no doubt that adolescence can be a difficult period for both youngsters and their parents. Although some people believe that difference of opinion at this time does more harm than good, I would argue that it is an essential stage of teenagers' development. On the one hand, those who believe teenage conflict is harmful might argue that it can damage the relationship between parents and their children. The is because such disputes can create tension in the family. For example, it is quite common for young people to start smoking at their age to impress their peers, but the resulting confrontations with parents can lead to communication afterwards. In contrast, if there is no conflict between them, there will be a much greater sense of happiness among family members. On the other hand, my view is that this dispute is important because it can help teenagers to mature. The reason for this is by having disagreements adolescents can form their own opinions. For instance, a child may grow in a family where their career choices are made by their elders, but he wants to choose a career of his own choice. If this child does not voice their opinion, they will be going against the principles. However, if they are willing to engage with their parents, their conscience will be clearer despite the agony of the argument. In conclusion, despite the danger of damaging the relations which teenage dispute can create, it is my firm believe that this time of friction is a vital step on the path to adolescents becoming mature and independently-minded adult.
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Some
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People
View teenage conflict with their
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parents
as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others
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see
it as something
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negative
which could
be avoided
.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that adolescence can be a difficult period for both youngsters and their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
. Although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that difference of opinion at this time does more harm than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
, I would argue that it is an essential stage of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
' development.

On the one hand, those who believe teenage conflict is harmful might argue that it can damage the relationship between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
and their children. The is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
such disputes can create tension in the family.
For example
, it is quite common for young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
smoking at their age to impress their peers,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the resulting confrontations with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
can lead to communication afterwards.
In contrast
, if there is no conflict between them, there will be a much greater sense of happiness among family members.

On the other hand
, my view is that this dispute is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
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because
it can
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help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
to mature.
The reason for this is
by having disagreements adolescents can form their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
opinions.
For instance
, a child may grow in a family where their career choices
are made
by their elders,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
he wants to choose a career of his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
choice. If this child does not voice their opinion, they will be going against the principles.
However
, if they are willing to engage with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
, their conscience will be clearer despite the agony of the argument.

In conclusion
, despite the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
of damaging the relations which teenage dispute can create, it is my firm believe that this time of friction is a vital step on the path to adolescents becoming mature and
independently
-minded adult.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay people nowadays are more willing to help other people (giving food or clothing) than in the past or not. v. 20

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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