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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v.7

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 7
In recent years, the decision of parents to start a family later in life has become an increasingly popular trend. There are a number of reasons for this trend, which is having a significant impact on both family life and on the community as a whole. ” There are two important reasons why more people nowadays are deciding against having children when they are young. Firstly, rather than embarking on parenthood, many individuals consider that building their own successful careers is top-priority. If they had to split their time between working and bringing up their offspring when they were in the early stages of their careers, their performance at work and promotion prospects could be negatively affected. Secondly, delaying childbirth could give young people countless opportunities to enjoy their lives. For example, this choice may let young couples have a richer social life, pursue their interests and hobbies or even to travel the world. However, this tendency could have negative consequences in terms of both family life and society. An important concern for a family is that raising children could be a huge challenge for older parents. Even though they might have a high socioeconomic status, as well as great experience and knowledge, it may not be easy for them to communicate with and relate to their children, due to the generation gap. Another negative factor is that getting pregnant after 35 years of age oftentimes carries more potential health risks. Specifically, this could increase the danger of having a miscarriage or stillbirth for older mothers, and babies might be at greater risk of having Down’s syndrome. Consequently, this could negatively affect the quality of the future workforce. In conclusion, there are a number of reasons why more and more people prefer giving birth later in life. As a result, there could be negative influences on individual families and the society at large.
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and on the community as a whole. ”

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important
reasons why more
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nowadays are deciding against
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children when they are young.
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,
rather
than embarking on parenthood,
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many
individuals consider that building their
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own
successful careers is top-priority. If they had to split their time between working and bringing up their offspring when they were in the early stages of their careers, their performance at work and promotion prospects could be
negatively
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affected
.
Secondly
, delaying childbirth could give young
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people
countless opportunities to enjoy their
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.
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, this choice may
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let
young couples have a richer social
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life
, pursue their interests and hobbies or even to travel the world.

However
, this tendency could have
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negative
consequences in terms of both
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family
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life
and society. An
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important
concern for a
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family
is that raising children could be a huge challenge for older parents.
Even though
they might have a high socioeconomic status,
as well
as great experience and knowledge, it may not be easy for them to communicate with and relate to their children, due to the generation gap. Another
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negative
factor is that getting pregnant after 35 years of age oftentimes carries more potential health
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risks
.
Specifically
, this could increase the
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danger
of
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a miscarriage or stillbirth for older mothers, and babies might be at greater
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risk
of
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having
Down’s syndrome.
Consequently
, this could
negatively
affect the quality of the future workforce.

In conclusion
, there are a number of reasons why more and more
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people
prefer giving birth later in
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life
.
As a result
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negative
influences on individual
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families
and the society at large.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 7

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
313 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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Grammatical Range: 8.5
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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