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Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions? v.1

Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions? v. 1
IN THIS PRESENT ERA, POPULATION OF THE AGED FOLKS HAVE BEEN RISING WITH TIME ESPECIALLY DUE TO THE SCIENCE DEVELOPMET. THIS HAS INCREASED THE COMPETETION AMONG THE EMPLOYEE FOR THE SIMILLAR WORKS. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WOULD DISCUSS THE MAJOR PROBLEM APPEARED AND SECONDLY, WHAT CAN THE GOVERNMENT DO TO TACKE THIS MENACE. ON THE ONE HAND, THE PRIME ISSUES OCCURRED IS INCREASED CRIME RATE. TO ELABORATE, WHEN THERE ARE LACK OF POSITION AVAILBALE TO YOUTH, THEY TRY TO ATTEMPT OFFENCE TO SATISFY THIER NECESSARY REQUIREMENTS. AS A RESULT, THEY MIGHT END UP BECOMING OFFENDER BECAUSE, THIS ATTMEPT PROOVE THEM THAT IT IS EASIER TO EARN MOMEY THAN WORKING AJRD FOR IT. FOR INSTANCE, THE CRIME BRANCH OF THE INDIA REPORT SAYS THAT 70% OF THE FRESHERS ARE JOBLESS NOWADAYS DUE TO THE PRESENCE OF EXPERIENCED WORKERS INTHE OFFICES. ON THE OTHER HAND, THE MAIN SOLUTION THE REGIME COULD TAKE IS MAKING OLDER PEOPLE RETIRE AT EARLY AGE AND OFFERING PLETHORA OF EMPYOMENT TO THE YOUNGSTERS. THIS WOULD RESULT IN THE DETERIORATE IN THE CRIMINAL ACTIVITIES AMOUNG THE YOUTH AND GIVING OPPORTUNITY TO AN OLDER GENERATION TO LIVE THIRE LIFE HAPPYLY. FOR INSTANCE, EMPLOYMENT AGENCIES OF THE CHINE DID A SURVEY AND FOUND THAT DUE TO THE EARLY RETIREMENT, 80% OF THE YOUNG GEBNERATION OF THE CHINE GOT THE WORK AND EARNING ENOUGH AMOUNT OF MONEY FOR THEIR SURVIVAL. IN CONCLUSION, OLDER GENERATION INDEED HELP THE FRESHERS AT CERTAIN LEVEL HOWEVER, TODAY'S YOUTH HAS LACK OF UNDERSTANDING OF THE ESSENTIALNESS OF THE AGED WORKERS. HENCE, THIS MIGHT END UP THEM BEING CRIMINAL. PERHAPS, IF THE INDIVIDUAL ALSO SUPPORT THE AUTHORITY THEN SURELY THIS ISSUES COULD BE SOLVE TO SOME EXTENT.
IN THIS PRESENT ERA, POPULATION OF THE AGED FOLKS HAVE BEEN RISING WITH TIME
ESPECIALLY
DUE TO THE SCIENCE
DEVELOPMET
. THIS HAS INCREASED THE
COMPETETION
AMONG THE EMPLOYEE FOR THE
SIMILLAR
WORKS.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WOULD DISCUSS THE MAJOR PROBLEM APPEARED AND
SECONDLY
, WHAT CAN THE
GOVERNMENT
DO TO
TACKE
THIS MENACE.

ON THE ONE HAND, THE PRIME ISSUES OCCURRED
IS INCREASED
CRIME RATE. TO ELABORATE, WHEN THERE ARE LACK OF POSITION
AVAILBALE
TO YOUTH, THEY TRY TO ATTEMPT
OFFENCE
TO SATISFY
THIER
NECESSARY REQUIREMENTS.
AS A RESULT
, THEY MIGHT
END
UP BECOMING OFFENDER
BECAUSE
, THIS
ATTMEPT
PROOVE
THEM THAT IT IS EASIER TO EARN
MOMEY
THAN WORKING
AJRD
FOR IT.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE CRIME BRANCH OF THE INDIA REPORT SAYS THAT 70% OF THE FRESHERS ARE JOBLESS NOWADAYS DUE TO THE PRESENCE OF EXPERIENCED WORKERS
INTHE
OFFICES.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, THE MAIN SOLUTION THE REGIME COULD TAKE IS MAKING OLDER
PEOPLE
RETIRE AT EARLY AGE AND OFFERING PLETHORA OF
EMPYOMENT
TO THE YOUNGSTERS. THIS WOULD RESULT IN
THE DETERIORATE
IN THE CRIMINAL ACTIVITIES
AMOUNG
THE YOUTH AND GIVING OPPORTUNITY TO AN OLDER GENERATION TO
LIVE
THIRE
LIFE
HAPPYLY
.
FOR INSTANCE
, EMPLOYMENT AGENCIES OF THE CHINE DID A SURVEY AND FOUND THAT DUE TO THE EARLY RETIREMENT, 80% OF THE YOUNG
GEBNERATION
OF THE CHINE
GOT
THE WORK AND EARNING
ENOUGH
AMOUNT OF MONEY FOR THEIR SURVIVAL.

IN CONCLUSION
, OLDER GENERATION
INDEED
HELP
THE FRESHERS AT CERTAIN LEVEL
HOWEVER
,
TODAY
'S YOUTH HAS LACK OF UNDERSTANDING OF THE
ESSENTIALNESS
OF THE AGED WORKERS.
HENCE
, THIS MIGHT
END
UP THEM BEING CRIMINAL. PERHAPS, IF THE INDIVIDUAL
ALSO
SUPPORT THE AUTHORITY THEN
SURELY
THIS
ISSUES COULD BE
SOLVE
TO
SOME
EXTENT.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
8
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