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Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions? v.1

Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions? v. 1
In recent year, finding a fob is one of the life's competitions. The older generation which is currently working in the organization has to compete with the fresh graduate. This is going to be the issue in the future and this essay will discuss some of the consequences of this issue and solution. Currently, there are too many fresh sage from college and university trying to find a gold after graduating. On the other hand, the employees which are working in the company have to emulate with the fresh sage. This situation will make the high race trouble appear, both of two sides will be competing with each other and this condition will create the stress to both sides. In the end, the result from this situation some people on both sides will be unemployed, and the economy is going to face with the unemployment dilemma. According to the situation, if the circumstance still keeps going like this, the possible solution will be a drawback. The highly work tournament trouble will be rising between the older generation and fresh graduates. Also, the number of unemployment will increase continuously year after year, this is the big influence of the high championship. Finally, these are going to affect to the economic trouble. In conclusion, the race between two generations bring several obstacles to social. For instance, high race between both age worker, economic question, tension from high race.
In recent year, finding a fob is one of the life's competitions. The older generation which is
currently
working in the organization
has to
compete with the
fresh
graduate. This is going to be the issue in the future and this essay will discuss
some of the
consequences of this issue and solution.

Currently
, there are too
many
fresh
sage from college and university trying to find a gold after graduating.
On the other hand
, the employees which are working in the
company
have to
emulate with the
fresh
sage. This situation will
make
the
high
race
trouble appear, both of two sides will be competing with each other and this condition will create the
stress
to both sides. In the
end
, the result from this situation
some
people
on both sides will
be unemployed
, and the economy is going to face with the unemployment dilemma.

According to the situation, if the circumstance
still
keeps
going like this, the possible solution will be a drawback. The
highly
work tournament trouble will be rising between the older generation and
fresh
graduates.
Also
, the number of unemployment will increase
continuously
year after year, this is the
big
influence of the
high
championship.
Finally
, these are going to affect to the economic trouble.

In conclusion
, the
race
between two generations bring several obstacles to social.
For instance
,
high
race
between both age worker, economic question, tension from
high
race
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
236 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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