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IELTS Writing Task 2 Topics: Number 4. Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

IELTS Writing Task 2 Topics: Number 4. Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. v. 1
It is so obvious that the media have an important impact in today’s life and the ways they publicize news should be mindful to correctly reflect the reality and accurate information. I am agreeing that the media should focus more on good news and I will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs. Media is the fastest source of communications and publications of news. When it is publicizing through the famous channels or radios, then people do not afraid that the news can be gossip. People rely on the source and it can affect the audience accordingly. Instance, if a TV announces that a dangerous virus recognized among the nations and it can feed up the survivor within 24 hours, people will have trembled. So, for such kind of news, it is good to be careful and accurate, rather than ignore the news or present it carelessly. Furthermore, the media should not always focus on the negative part of social existing problems or undue news to create conflict among the nations or different level of society. They should act independently and constantly behave neutral against the sensitive subjects that become a serious issue for the civilian. Instead, they can broadcast more good news to contribute the success and development of their country by consisting the peace and patriotism. Media have an excellent impact on audiences changed. Therefore, as much good news includes in the publication the good result will be impacted. At the end, the media have an important role in publicising trustful information and they have eminence impact on the behaviours of audiences, so it is necessary to consider more good news in their broadcasting.
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obvious that the
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media
have an
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important
impact in
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today
’s life and the ways they publicize
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news
should be mindful to
correctly
reflect the reality and accurate information. I
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am agreeing
that the
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media
should focus more on
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good
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news
and I will
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explain
the reasons in the following paragraphs.

Media is the fastest source of communications and publications of
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news
. When it is publicizing through the
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famous
channels or radios, then
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people
do not afraid that the
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news
can be gossip.
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People
rely on the source and it can affect the audience
accordingly
. Instance, if a TV announces that a
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dangerous
virus recognized among the nations and it can feed up the survivor within 24 hours,
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people
will have trembled.
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So
, for such kind of
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news
, it is
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good
to be careful and accurate,
rather
than
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ignore
the
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news
or present it
carelessly
.

Furthermore
, the
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media
should not always focus on the
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negative
part of social existing problems or undue
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news
to create conflict among the nations or
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different
level of society. They should act
independently
and
constantly
behave neutral against the sensitive subjects that become a serious issue for the civilian.
Instead
, they can broadcast more
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good
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news
to contribute the success and development of their country by consisting the peace and patriotism.
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Media
have an excellent impact on audiences
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changed
.
Therefore
, as much
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good
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news
includes in the publication the
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good
result will
be impacted
.

At the
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end
, the
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media
have an
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important
role in
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publicising
trustful
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information and
they have eminence impact on the
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behaviours
of audiences,
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so
it is necessary to consider more
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good
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news
in their broadcasting.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay IELTS Writing Task 2 Topics: Number 4. Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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