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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed? v.17

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed? v. 17
Lately, certain groups prefer to be self- dependent instead of working under any institution or setup. This is probably because of the recent increase in workplace abuse in our communities and the time wasted in building someone else's empire rather than developing yours. This essay will elaborate on this course and finally, state the demerits of self-owned businesses. Firstly, this new generation has brought with it a lot of abuse cases, most of which are workplace related. This has resulted in a back down on the number of persons willing to work under any official body reasons being that no one wants to be maltreated all in the name of a job. For instance, in Africa, most employers verbally, physically and emotionally condemn their employees, creating a temporary if not permanent physiological damage to such a worker. Statistically, it is proven that a person who is continually abused have the tendency to commit suicide or even murder the source of their pain. In a bid to avoid this bad situation, youths have decided to create a means of survival for themselves and their families aside white-collar jobs. Also, the time and zeal put into ensuring the growth of the company by many workers can be challenged properly into their own private setups. This implies that rather than wasting a resource as precious as time, it is best to use it for self benefit. Therefore, white collar jobs, are considered time wasting and physiological condemnation thus people opt to be self employed. Secondly, the cons of this choice include; lack of focus on getting the job done effectively and no continuity because of financial crisis. The focus of self- employed people are easily shifted because of the absence of supervision, unlike on organized settings, there is little or no monitoring of the duties thus leading to failure. In the same vain, poverty can lead to the total shutdown of such businesses bringing about frustration and backwardness. For example; when the means of carrying out a project is not forthcoming, the business suffers a shutdown unlike in organized offices where loans can be collected to finish up a plan. In summary, self dependency is a current trend mainly as a result of the time invested in office jobs are seen as waste, work related abuse although the disadvantages include; no continuity and lack of focus.
Lately, certain groups prefer to be self- dependent
instead
of working under any institution or setup. This is
probably
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the recent increase in workplace abuse in our communities and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
wasted in building someone else's empire
rather
than developing yours. This essay will elaborate on this course and
finally
, state the demerits of self-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
businesses.

Firstly
, this new generation has brought with it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
abuse cases, most of which are workplace related. This has resulted in a back down on the number of persons willing to work under any official body reasons being that no one wants to
be maltreated
all in the name of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
.
For instance
, in Africa, most employers
verbally
,
physically
and
emotionally
condemn their employees, creating a temporary if not permanent physiological damage to such a worker.
Statistically
, it
is proven
that a person who is
continually
abused have the tendency to commit suicide or even murder the source of their pain. In a bid to avoid this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
situation, youths have decided to create a means of survival for themselves and their families aside white-collar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
.
Also
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and zeal put into ensuring the growth of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
workers can
be challenged
properly
into their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
private setups.
This implies that
rather
than wasting a resource as precious as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, it is best to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it for self benefit.
Therefore
, white collar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
,
are considered
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
time wasting
and physiological condemnation
thus
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
opt to be
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
self employed
.

Secondly
, the cons of this choice include; lack of focus on getting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
done
effectively
and no continuity
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of financial crisis. The focus of self- employed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are
easily
shifted
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the absence of supervision, unlike on organized settings, there is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
or no monitoring of the duties
thus
leading to failure. In the same vain, poverty can lead to the total shutdown of such businesses bringing about frustration and backwardness.
For example
; when the means of carrying out a project is not forthcoming, the business suffers a shutdown unlike in organized offices where loans can
be collected
to finish up a plan.

In summary, self dependency is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
trend
mainly
as a result
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
invested in office
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
as waste, work related abuse although the disadvantages include; no continuity and lack of focus.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
393 words
8
Overall Band Score
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