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Many filmmakers make movies based on books. When a movie is produced based on books, some people prefer to read books before watching films, other people choose to watch the movie first. Which one do you think is better? Why? v.1

Many filmmakers make movies based on books. When a movie is produced based on books, some people prefer to read books before watching films, other people choose to watch the movie first. Which one do you think is better? Why? v. 1
Currently, people all around the world have faced with the serious epidemic which is called Covid-19. Citizens are approached free health care from their goverment. This can have both positive and negative. On the one hand, supporting free health care is beneficial in some way. Firstly, one of the main benefits is that all citizens has approached to the same quality of care and treatments especially poor people. Medicine services and treatments are quite costly with people. In fact, expensive health care cost being from prescription charges and treatment cost prevents a great number of these people from meeting doctors to treat minor disease for a long time and their health certainly be worse. Secondly, the goverment can control the spread of illness and diagnose at the initial level. For example, thousands of people were kept away citizens area and then were taken care of by doctors, nurses, and military goverment. After a short- strict time, patients who were attacked by the virus have been got rid of the disease. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages of free medical services and treatments. The goverment invested the amount of money for supporting their citizens, therefore, the budget is nearly scarcity. It makes an important effect to another field that need to be supplied such as education, foreign- economics or culture. Another problem is that the lack of doctors, trained nurses can have a detrimental effect on the quality of medical centres frequently overload with patients. It means that doctor has met and took care of many cases continually. It is hard to focus on one person. Additionally, medical staffs have to work long time and nurse a large number of people. In conclusion, free health care has both advantages and disadvantages. National authority should motivate beneficial in effective ways.
Currently
,
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people
all around the world have faced with the serious epidemic which
is called
Covid-19.
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Citizens
are approached
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free
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health
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care
from their
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goverment
. This can have both
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positive
and
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negative
.

On the one hand, supporting
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free
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health
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care
is beneficial in
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some
way.
Firstly
, one of the main benefits is that all
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citizens
has approached to the same quality of
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care
and
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treatments
especially
poor
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people
. Medicine services and
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treatments
are quite costly with
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people
. In fact, expensive
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health
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care
cost being from prescription charges and
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treatment
cost
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prevents
a great number of these
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people
from meeting
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doctors
to treat minor disease for a long time and their
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health
certainly
be worse.
Secondly
, the
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goverment
can control the spread of illness and diagnose at the initial level.
For example
, thousands of
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people
were
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kept
away
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citizens
area and then
were taken
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care
of by
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doctors
, nurses, and military
Possible spelling mistake found.
goverment
. After a short- strict time, patients who
were attacked
by the virus have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
rid of the disease.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
disadvantages of
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free
medical services and
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treatments
. The
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goverment
invested the amount of money for supporting their
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citizens
,
therefore
, the budget is
nearly
scarcity. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
effect to another field that need to
be supplied
such as education, foreign- economics or culture. Another problem is that the lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doctors
, trained nurses can have a detrimental effect on the quality of medical
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centres
frequently
overload with patients. It means that
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doctor
has met and took
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care
of
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many
cases
continually
. It is
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hard
to focus on one person.
Additionally
, medical staffs
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have to
work long time and nurse
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a large number of
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people
.

In conclusion
,
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free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
care
has both advantages and disadvantages. National authority should motivate beneficial in effective ways.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many filmmakers make movies based on books. When a movie is produced based on books, some people prefer to read books before watching films, other people choose to watch the movie first. Which one do you think is better? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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