In today’s world, skilled and work visas have been opened by manifold developed countries for second and third world nations. These would create ample opportunities for aspirants to migrate with family. One school of thought avers that, this process would be beneficial for professionals and their family members, while others do not concur with the statement. In this essay, I will discuss both the arguments in following paragraphs and support the formal point.
There are myriad evidences which elaborate the privileges of living in ultra developed nations. At the outset, the education system of these countries has been maintained by brilliant and experienced people. They developed it in such a manner, neither it is boring and essay nor too tough, while it helps the students to get a white collar job. To cite an example, a recent survey by leading newspaper had revealed that predominantly students of the advanced countries have better knowledge of mostly fields than others country’s students. Therefore it could be a gold chance for migrants’ children to upgrade their skills during their visit.
However above mentioned boons are not without thorns. Firstly, it could be really difficult for the infants to comprehend the host country’s culture and adapt it. This is because, they are not enough mature to distinguish within their own and second county culture, therefore they could remain in dilemma which one has to follow at which place.
On the whole, although there are significant drawbacks for children living in overseas country, it manifold advantages cannot be overlooked. Once they overcome these issues they will secure their future and live luxury life. 
In  
today
’s world, skilled and work visas have  
been opened
 by manifold developed  
countries
 for second and third world nations. These would create ample opportunities for aspirants to migrate with family. One school of  
thought
 avers that, this process would be beneficial for professionals and their family members, while others do not concur with the statement. In this essay, I will discuss both the arguments in following paragraphs and support the formal point.
There are myriad evidences which elaborate the privileges of living in ultra developed nations. At the outset, the education system of these  
countries
 has  
been maintained
 by brilliant and experienced  
people
. They developed it in such a manner, neither it is boring and essay nor too tough, while it  
helps
 the students to  
get
 a white collar job. To cite an example, a recent survey by leading newspaper had revealed that  
predominantly
 students of the advanced  
countries
 have better knowledge of  
mostly
 fields than others  
country’s
 students.  
Therefore
 it could be a gold chance for migrants’ children to upgrade their  
skills
 during their visit. 
However
 above mentioned boons are not without thorns.  
Firstly
, it could be  
really
 difficult for the infants to comprehend the host  
country’s
 culture and adapt it. This is  
because
, they are not  
enough
 mature to distinguish within their  
own
 and second county culture,  
therefore
 they could remain in dilemma which one  
has to
 follow at which place. 
On the whole
, although there are significant drawbacks for children living in overseas  
country
, it  
manifold
 advantages cannot  
be overlooked
. Once they overcome these issues they will secure their future and  
live
 luxury life. 
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