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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world unfortunately it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world unfortunately it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 2
Presently, tourism is the major income source for each and every nation and there are many countries which mainly dependent on tourism. I believe that, there are no any difficulties occurred regarding people' s cultures and their thought process. So here i will outline what are the benefits of tourism and how this industry became large. Firstly, due to globalization international tourism has been flourished by exploring new places is the popular trend among tourist. Internet has made it possible. International media promotes new places and for visitors. Secondly many countries are encouraging tourism by developing some places. In fact some countries are particularly focusing on their tourist and tourist places by providing pleasant experience. For example, Dubai has made some rules for encouraging tourism by applying trade free zone and Also made some strict laws for managing ease. Moreover some countries have designed some places for tourism only, like Singapore and Switzerland. consequently this countries are developed countries. On the other side, Some people believes that it creates tension for understanding different cultures for local citizens as well as among visitors. If it is happened then there is no any countries promotes their tourism. International language like English has became popular for communication among people who comes from different regions. In fact it helps to know their culture and their tradition. Many underdeveloped countries have come up with encouraging their tourism. Tourism is the best way to grow economy. To sum up, Tourism is the easy way to boost country' s economy. I think of understanding different cultures is not a major issue as far as tourism concern.
Presently
,
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tourism
is the major income source for each and every nation and there are
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many
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countries
which
mainly
dependent on
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tourism
. I believe that, there are
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no
any difficulties occurred regarding
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people&
#039; s cultures and their
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thought
process.
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here
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i
will outline what are the benefits of
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tourism
and how this industry became large.

Firstly
, due to globalization international
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tourism
has
been flourished
by exploring new
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places
is the popular trend among tourist. Internet has made it possible. International media promotes new
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places
and for visitors.
Secondly


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many
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countries
are encouraging
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tourism
by developing
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some
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places
. In fact
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some
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countries
are
particularly
focusing on their tourist and tourist
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places
by providing pleasant experience.
For example
, Dubai has made
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some
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rules
for encouraging
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tourism
by applying trade free zone and
Also
made
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some
strict laws for managing
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ease
.
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Moreover
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some
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countries
have designed
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some
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places
for
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tourism
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only
, like Singapore and Switzerland.
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consequently
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this
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countries
are
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developed countries
.

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people
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believes
that it creates tension for understanding
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different
cultures for local citizens
as well
as among visitors. If it
is happened
then there is
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no
any
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countries
promotes their
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tourism
. International language like English has
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became
popular for communication among
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people
who
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comes
from
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different
regions. In
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fact it
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helps
to know their culture and their tradition.
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Many
underdeveloped
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countries
have
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come
up with encouraging their
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tourism
.
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Tourism
is the best way to grow economy.

To sum up,
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Tourism
is the easy way to boost
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country&
#039; s economy. I
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think
of understanding
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different
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cultures


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is
not a major issue as far as
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tourism
concern.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world unfortunately it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
269 words
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