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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.6

Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. with this statement? v. 6
It is perhaps ironic that with the all problems city dwellers face, the number of people who choose to live and work in major cities continues to multiply. Despite numerous problems that exist in urban areas, the allure of cities still attracts hordes of migrants daily. Two of the key problems facing urban dwellers will be examined, alongside possible solutions to these problems. The first major problem is related to the issue of overpopulation. Due to the vast numbers of urban migrants, many major cities around the world can no longer support the burgeoning populace. Beijing and Delhi are prime examples of this acute problem. Overpopulation often has a knock-on effect and causes other problems by placing stress on the infrastructure of a particular area. For example, unemployment rates rise because there are not enough jobs for everyone. In order to solve this problem, it is vital for governments to implement state-led family planning programs to encourage individuals to take responsibility for their own contraception. One example of this program is in China, with its “one-child” policy. It has been suggested that overcrowding is also a major problem, which is often due to the overpopulation problem. One consequence of overcrowding is that people cannot afford to live in urban areas because of exorbitant land prices. In many large cities across the globe, this has created the emergence of slums, such as in Mexico City. Slums are often inhumane places to live, as there is often a lack of sanitation, basic shelter or electricity. One possible solution is for governments to limit the number of people living in cities. One way of doing this is to regenerate rural areas, so that young people will remain there and not be tempted to move to cities. Another method is for governments to provide state-owned housing which will hopefully allow poorer inhabitants to afford to live in basic housing, rather than slums. In conclusion, there is no doubt that the economic inequality, which exists between the rich and the poor, has created key social problems such as overpopulation and overcrowding. If governments continue to neglect these two issues, then these urban problems will become more prevalent and cause widespread global collapse.
It is perhaps ironic that with the all
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problems
city dwellers face, the number of
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people
who choose to
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live
and work in
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major
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cities
continues to multiply. Despite numerous
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problems
that exist in
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urban
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areas
, the allure of
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cities
still
attracts hordes of migrants daily. Two of the key
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problems
facing
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urban
dwellers will
be examined
, alongside possible solutions to these problems.

The
first
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major
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problem
is related
to the issue of
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overpopulation
. Due to the vast numbers of
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urban
migrants,
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many
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major
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cities
around the world can no longer support the burgeoning populace. Beijing and Delhi are prime examples of this acute
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problem
.
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Overpopulation
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often
has a knock-on effect and causes other
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problems
by placing
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stress
on the infrastructure of a particular
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area
.
For example
, unemployment rates rise
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because
there are not
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enough
jobs for everyone. In order to solve this
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problem
, it is vital for
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governments
to implement state-led family planning programs to encourage individuals to take responsibility for their
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own
contraception. One example of this program is in China, with its “one-child” policy.

It has
been suggested
that overcrowding is
also
a
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major
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problem
, which is
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often
due to the
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overpopulation
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problem
. One consequence of overcrowding is that
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people
cannot afford to
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live
in
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urban
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areas
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because
of exorbitant land prices. In
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many
large
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cities
across the globe, this has created the emergence of slums, such as in Mexico City. Slums are
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often
inhumane places to
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live
, as there is
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often
a lack of sanitation, basic shelter or electricity. One possible solution is for
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governments
to limit the number of
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people
living in
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cities
. One way of doing this is to regenerate rural
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areas
,
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so
that young
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people
will remain there and not
be tempted
to
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move
to
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cities
. Another method is for
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governments
to provide state-
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owned
housing which will
hopefully
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allow
poorer inhabitants to afford to
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live
in basic housing,
rather
than slums.

In conclusion
, there is no doubt that the economic inequality, which exists between the rich and the poor, has created key social
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problems
such as
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overpopulation
and overcrowding. If
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governments
continue to neglect these two issues, then these
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urban
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problems
will become more prevalent and cause widespread global collapse.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. with this statement? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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