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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.2

Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. with this statement. v. 2
In this modern era, the number of women working full-time is increasing at a great pace. It is widely believed that household chores should be distributed equally among male and female partners’. In my opinion, I strongly agreed that men should give their hand to women in household activities for reducing the burden on women and promote gender equality. To being with, it is unfair to impose all household work on women as their role in the present time has changed significantly. Since it becomes very difficult for single wage-earner to support family, The majority of females have sought a full-time job to supplement their household income. Consequently, If the work should be shared equally among partners’ than females should also enjoy their life and live happily with their families. For instance, the people of India work cooperatively and complete all household chores on time so that they can spend quality time with each other. Furthermore, splitting household duties evenly can successfully create a gender-equal environment for strong support and respect for each other. If parents share their daily responsibilities, they are able to can convey a storing message to their children that women and females are not synonym with households and by helping them we can show our love and support to our beloved family. For example, by helping his wife do the dishes, a husband can let her know how much he loves her. To conclude, I strongly believe that by splitting household chores equally, it not only reduces the burden of female partners’ but also helps gender equality. Hence, it is advisable for both gender to share domestic work.
In this modern era, the number of
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women
working full-time is increasing at a great pace. It is
widely
believed that
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household
chores should
be distributed
equally
among male and
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female
partners’. In my opinion, I
strongly
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agreed
that
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men
should give their hand to
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women
in
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household
activities for reducing the burden on
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women
and promote gender equality.

To
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being
with, it is unfair to impose all
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household
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work
on
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women
as their role in the present time has
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changed
significantly
. Since it becomes
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very
difficult for single wage-earner to support family, The majority of
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females
have sought a full-time job to supplement their
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household
income.
Consequently
, If the
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work
should
be shared
equally
among partners’ than
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females
should
also
enjoy their life and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
happily
with their families.
For instance
, the
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people
of India
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work
cooperatively
and complete all
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household
chores on time
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so
that they can spend quality time with each other.

Furthermore
, splitting
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household
duties
evenly
can
successfully
create a gender-equal environment for strong support and respect for each other. If parents share their daily responsibilities, they are able to can convey a storing message to their children that
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women
and
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females
are not synonym with
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households
and by helping them we can
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show
our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and support to our beloved family.
For example
, by helping his wife do the dishes, a husband can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
her know how much he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loves
her.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that by splitting
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household
chores
equally
, it not
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only
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reduces
the burden of
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female
partners’
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
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helps
gender equality.
Hence
, it is advisable for both gender to share domestic
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work
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. with this statement. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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