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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.10

Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. with this statement. v. 10
I am convinced the women of multiple nations are well educated and enrolling themselves in full time jobs for making their life fruitful. Consequently, it is asserted by some that the house related chores should be equally distributed among both genders. I am in consummate accord that the men should give their hand to women in household activities. To begin with, every female when come back from working place feel tired and depressed as they also have to look after the children and prepare dinner for all family members. In this way, the women felt restless and do not concentrate on the house chores and working place. Therefore, if the work would be shared among both sexes than the female would also enjoy their life and live happily with their family. To illustrate, the people of united states work cooeperately and complete all house related activitie in shorter period of time and spend quality of time with each other. furthermore, the women do not go to jobs for their own sake, they go for earning and fulfill the needs of their families. On the other hand, if they have to work in house for longer hours it would be complete injustice and they would feel bored from daily life and may be felt ill also due to lack of proper rest. furthermore, females would also not able to spend precious time with blooming buds and hence they would choose wrong directions in their life without getting guidance from their mothers. So, all these problems would be resolved only if men would also contribute equally for the cleanliness of house and preparing meals for their family. In conclusion, I am completely agree that the both genders should have to work collaboratively for the smooth running of life.
I
am convinced
the
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women
of multiple nations are
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well educated
and enrolling themselves in full
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time
jobs for making their
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life
fruitful.
Consequently
, it
is asserted
by
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some
that the
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house
related chores should be
equally
distributed among both genders. I am in consummate accord that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
should give their hand to
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women
in household activities.

To
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begin
with, every female when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back from working place feel tired and depressed as they
also
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have to
look after the children and prepare dinner for all family members. In this way, the
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women
felt restless and do not concentrate on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
chores and working place.
Therefore
, if the
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work
would
be shared
among both sexes than the female would
also
enjoy their
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life
and
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live
happily
with their family. To illustrate, the
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people
of
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united states
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work
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cooeperately
and complete all
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house
related
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activitie
in shorter period of
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time
and spend quality of
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time
with each other.

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furthermore
, the
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women
do not go to jobs for their
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own
sake, they go for earning and fulfill the needs of their families.
On the other hand
, if they
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have to
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work
in
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house
for longer hours it would be complete
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injustice and
they would feel bored from daily
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life
and may
be felt
ill
also
due to lack of proper rest.
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furthermore
, females would
also
not able to spend precious
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time
with blooming buds and
hence
they would choose
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wrong
directions in their
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life
without getting guidance from their mothers.
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So
, all these problems would
be resolved
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only
if
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men
would
also
contribute
equally
for the cleanliness of
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house
and preparing meals for their family.

In conclusion
, I am completely
Consider using a past participle here: "agreed".
agree
that the both genders should
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
collaboratively
for the smooth running of
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life
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. with this statement. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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