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Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or countries. In other words, it is an international problem to what extent do you agree or disagree. Write at least 250 words v.1

Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or countries. In other words, it is an international problem v. 1
The environmental problems are the worldwide issues that people are facing in this day and age. It is thought that these problems are so big that individual persons or a single country cannot resolve, and all nations should take charge of them. However, some people think in the other ways. From my point of view, I agree with the opinion that everyone has to join hands in tackling the phenomenon. On the one hand, there are several reasons for this problem. It’s believed that the most significant cause is the dust from vehicles such as cars, motorbikes; from factories, industrial areas and so forth. In this case, everyone has to reduce the number of uses the individual transportations and replace by the public transports. It is worthless if there is only one person realize the importance of the environment and start to protect it by himself, without the supports from others. On the other hand, people cannot help the Earth just by themselves. For instance, the plastic waste is another issue that needs to be concerned. It has not been solved yet because most people continue using plastic things, and the governments have not given the most efficient solution. The amount of garbage keeps increasing and as a result, this huge quantity is flowing into the sea. It leads to not only the death of many rare marines but also the unattractive sights. In conclusion, there are two aspects of the problem, and I agree that these problems cannot be solved by individuals. Everyone has to come together to tackle the issues immediately. I believe that the Earth will be soon recovered with our efforts.
The environmental
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problems
are the worldwide issues that
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people
are facing in this day and age. It is
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thought
that these
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problems
are
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so
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big
that individual persons or a single country cannot resolve, and all nations should take charge of them.
However
,
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some
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people
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think
in the other ways. From my point of view, I
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agree
with the opinion that everyone
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has to
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join
hands in tackling the phenomenon.

On the one hand, there are several reasons for this
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problem
. It’s believed that the most significant cause is the dust from vehicles such as cars, motorbikes; from factories, industrial areas and
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so
forth.
In this case
, everyone
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has to
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reduce
the number of
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uses
the individual transportations and replace by the public transports. It is worthless if there is
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only
one person realize the importance of the environment and
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start
to protect it by himself, without the supports from others.

On the other hand
,
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people
cannot
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help
the Earth
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just
by themselves.
For instance
, the plastic waste is another issue that needs to
be concerned
. It has not
been solved
yet
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because
most
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people
continue using plastic things, and the
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governments
have not
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given
the most efficient solution. The amount of garbage
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keeps
increasing and
as a result
, this huge quantity is flowing into the sea. It leads to not
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only
the death of
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many
rare marines
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but
also
the unattractive sights.

In conclusion
, there are two aspects of the
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problem
, and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that these
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problems
cannot
be solved
by individuals. Everyone
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has to
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come
together to tackle the issues immediately. I believe that the Earth will be
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soon
recovered with our efforts.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or countries. In other words, it is an international problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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