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In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. v. 1
It is common at the present time to see people getting updates on the latest news from the internet rather than the traditional method of reading a newspaper. I would argue that electronic sources of news will gradually replace that of the newspaper. Newspapers remain an important source of news for several reasons. The first of these is that the older generation still prefer to read their news this way, which is because they have traditionally bought a newspaper over the years and so do not wish to change or simply do not know how to do so online in some cases. In addition to this a newspaper also comes with other supplements, such as magazines and television guides, and sources of entertainment, such as crosswords. This makes it more attractive for some than going online. However, though newspapers may not disappear completely, the Internet is likely to become, the most dominant source of news over time. This is primarily because younger people tend to read the news online and prefers not to pay for it, so those reading newspapers, the older generations, will gradually decline. This links in with the second reason, which is that as media companies start to see a drop in income from newspapers, printing them will become unprofitable and they will be forced to find ways to make money from news online. In conclusion, although newspapers remain popular today, they will gradually be replaced by the desire to read the news through electronic sources. This may be a sad loss given their history, but unfortunately it is an unavoidable development.
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see
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people
getting updates on the latest
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news
from the internet
rather
than the traditional method of reading a
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newspaper
. I would argue that electronic
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sources
of
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news
will
gradually
replace that of the newspaper.

Newspapers remain an
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important
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source
of
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news
for several reasons. The
first
of these is that the older generation
still
prefer to read their
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news
this way, which is
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because
they have
traditionally
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bought
a
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newspaper
over the years and
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so
do not wish to
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change
or
simply
do not know how to do
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so
online in
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some
cases.
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to this a
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newspaper
also
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comes
with other supplements, such as magazines and television guides, and
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sources
of entertainment, such as crosswords. This
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makes
it more attractive for
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some
than going online.

However
, though
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newspapers
may not disappear completely, the Internet is likely to become, the most dominant
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source
of
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news
over time. This is
primarily
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because
younger
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people
tend to read the
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news
online and prefers not to pay for it,
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so
those reading
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newspapers
, the older generations, will
gradually
decline. This links in with the second reason, which is that as media
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companies
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start
to
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see
a drop in income from
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newspapers
, printing them will become
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unprofitable and
they will
be forced
to find ways to
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make
money from
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news
online.

In conclusion
, although
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newspapers
remain popular
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today
, they will
gradually
be replaced
by the desire to read the
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news
through electronic
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sources
. This may be a sad loss
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given
their history,
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but
unfortunately it is an unavoidable development.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
8.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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