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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.13

Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 13
With recent technological advancements, the production processes of consumer goods have become quicker and more comfortable. It was observed that usage of retail goods is increasing day by day, and these goods are playing an essential role in today's lifestyle. There are many positive and negative consequences as a result of this. Undoubtedly, as a result of modern targeted advertising, people are forced to buy many retail products, even though those are not necessary. Most of the time, the purchased consumer goods are not used and kept aside. Advertisements of attractive online offers and credit card offers force people to buy; however, as a result of this behaviour, people run into credit card debts. Nevertheless, by carefully selecting what is actually needed and then moving to purchase the products, people can enjoy many benefits. Moreover, these goods are mainly targeted to ease the work in a productive manner, and by proper usage, people can save time. In the current lifestyle, consumers search for products which assist in reducing energy usage as well as their time. Furthermore, the companies are investing heavily in research and development to introduce new consumer products ranging from kitchen to living room. A decade a ago to prepare a meal took nearly two hours, nonetheless, currently with the assist of consumer products that have reduced it to one hour. In the past, a flat television screen cost a fortune, though now it cost a fraction of that with additional features such as surround sound and 3D effects in HD quality. In conclusion, the advantages of usage of consumer goods outweigh the disadvantages. Carefully selecting the proper products people have the luxury of saving time and they can enjoy life to the fullest.
With recent technological advancements, the production processes of
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consumer
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goods
have become quicker and more comfortable. It
was observed
that
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usage
of retail
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goods
is increasing day by day, and these
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goods
are playing an essential role in
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today
's lifestyle. There are
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many
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positive
and
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negative
consequences
as a result
of this.

Undoubtedly
,
as a result
of modern targeted advertising,
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people
are forced
to
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buy
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many
retail
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products
,
even though
those are not necessary. Most of the time, the
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purchased
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consumer
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goods
are not
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used
and
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kept
aside. Advertisements of attractive online offers and credit card offers force
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people
to
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buy
;
however
,
as a result
of this
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behaviour
,
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people
run into credit card debts.

Nevertheless
, by
carefully
selecting what is actually needed and then moving to
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purchase
the
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products
,
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people
can enjoy
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many
benefits.
Moreover
, these
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goods
are
mainly
targeted to
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ease
the work
Consider replacing "in a productive manner" with the adverb for "productive"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a productive manner
, and by proper
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usage
,
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people
can save time. In the
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current
lifestyle,
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consumers
search for
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products
which assist in reducing energy
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usage
as well
as their time.

Furthermore
, the
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companies
are investing
heavily
in research and development to introduce new
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consumer
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products
ranging from kitchen to living room. A decade
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a
ago to prepare a meal took
nearly
two hours, nonetheless,
currently
with the assist of
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consumer
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products
that have
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reduced
it to one hour. In the past, a flat television screen cost a fortune, though
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now
it cost a fraction of that with additional features such as surround sound and 3D effects in HD quality.

In conclusion
, the advantages of
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usage
of
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consumer
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goods
outweigh the disadvantages.
Carefully
selecting the proper
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products
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people
have the luxury of saving
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time and
they can enjoy life to the fullest.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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