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The system used for rubbish garbage collection in your local area is not working properly This is causing problems for you and your neighbours Write a letter to the local council In your letter Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working pro v.1

The system used for rubbish garbage collection in your local area is not working properly This is causing problems for you and your neighbours Write a letter to the local council In your letter Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working pro v. 1
In recent years, there has been an increasing number of shopping malls being built, leading to the disappearance of small stores. In my opinion, this change brings about both positive and negative impacts, though the impacts are more negative in the long term. On the one hand, the boom in the number of shopping malls has offered customers a wide range of benefits. First of all, people can now save time shopping thanks to the availability of many types of stores located in the one complex. Shopping malls offer groceries, clothing, and books, alongside food courts and entertainment facilities, all under the one roof. This provides a lot of convenience to people who choose to shop there instead of in separate smaller stores. Moreover, shopping malls usually offer more discounts and promotions that customers can benefit from, when compared to small stores. Furthermore, smaller stores cannot usually provide customers with the added advantage of large, convenient and safe parking facilities that most shopping malls offer. As a result, more and more people are choosing to shop at large shopping malls, leading to a decrease in the number of people purchasing goods from small shops. There is, however, a number of benefits to people and communities that shopping in smaller stores can bring. For example, locally-owned, family-run businesses are more likely to provide a friendlier and better customer service than larger shopping malls and chain stores. In addition, more locally owned small businesses are better for local economies and communities in the long term, by providing more employment, profits and income to local people. In conclusion, the proliferation of shopping malls could have positive effects on customers, but it is likely to drive small local businesses out of business, and have a negative impact on local economies, with most profits being taken by non-local businesses.
In recent years, there has been an increasing
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number
of
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shopping
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malls
being built
, leading to the disappearance of
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small
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stores
. In my opinion, this
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change
brings about both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts, though the impacts are more
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negative
in the long term.

On the one hand, the boom in the
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number
of
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shopping
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malls
has
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offered
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customers
a wide range of benefits.
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First of all
,
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people
can
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now
save time
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shopping
thanks to the availability of
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many
types of
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stores
located in the one complex.
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Shopping
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malls
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groceries, clothing, and books, alongside food courts and entertainment facilities, all under the one roof. This provides
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a lot of
convenience to
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people
who choose to shop there
instead
of in separate smaller stores.

Moreover
,
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shopping
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malls
usually
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offer
more discounts and promotions that
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customers
can benefit from, when compared to
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small
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stores
.
Furthermore
, smaller
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stores
cannot
usually
provide
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customers
with the
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added
advantage of large, convenient and safe parking facilities that most
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shopping
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malls
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offer
.
As a result
, more and more
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people
are choosing to shop at large
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shopping
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malls
, leading to a decrease in the
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number
of
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people
purchasing
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goods
from
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small
shops.

There is,
however
, a
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number
of benefits to
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people
and communities that
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shopping
in smaller
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stores
can bring.
For example
,
locally
-
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owned
, family-run
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businesses
are more likely to provide a friendlier and better
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customer
service than larger
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shopping
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malls
and chain
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stores
.
In addition
, more
locally
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owned
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small
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businesses
are better for
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local
economies and communities in the long term, by providing more employment, profits and income to
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local
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people
.

In conclusion
, the proliferation of
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shopping
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malls
could have
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positive
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effects
on
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customers
,
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but
it is likely to drive
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small
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local
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businesses
out of
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business
, and have a
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negative
impact on
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local
economies, with most profits
being taken
by non-local
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businesses
.
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IELTS essay The system used for rubbish garbage collection in your local area is not working properly This is causing problems for you and your neighbours Write a letter to the local council In your letter Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working pro v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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