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Nowadays, children have a lot of homework to do. Some people, however, believe that less homework means less stress for children, so they will be able to learn other useful skills. Do you agree or disagree? (Sample answer_Misnariah) v.2

Nowadays, children have a lot of homework to do. Some people, however, believe that less homework means less stress for children, so they will be able to learn other useful skills. (Sample answer_Misnariah) v. 2
Spending loads of hours on the school homework makes children less creative as they always remain busy doing school work. In order to remove stress and being engaged in extra-curricular activities, some subscribe to this belief that there ought to be less homework given to the pupils. I tend to agree with this viewpoint it not only helps in their well-being but also develops holistic growth of the pupils. Doing a limited amount of study for some hours makes children physically and mentally active. To put it in another way, if there is more time, they would engage themselves in sports activities. Playing games would lead to the formation of new cells and rejuvenates the mind, resultantly, stress would be reduced. Thence, the proper functioning of the body would take place. Eminent Psychologists have revealed that children who play games daily have more intellectual power than others. Although sitting long hours for study makes one expertise in their subjects, spending some time on recreational activities helps in the cognitive development of the students. When the budding minds get spare time, it is more likely to indulge theirs in some sort of activities such as painting, dancing, and singing which would definitely enhance their critical skills. In this way, they would not only perform better in scholastic areas but also in non-scholastic areas, consequently, their all-round development would take place. For instance, in Switzerland, where homework is given to pupils only at weekends, children are more creative. In conclusion, homework is crucial for students, but creativity, which arises from recreational activities, has a significant role in children' s lives in the development of their comprehensive growth as well as their physical and mental growth. Schools had better provide adequate classwork to pupils.
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makes
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children
less creative as they always remain busy doing school work.

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stress
and
being engaged
in extra-curricular
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activities
,
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some
subscribe to this belief that there ought to be less
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homework
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given
to the pupils. I tend to
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agree
with this viewpoint it not
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only
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helps
in their well-being
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but
also
develops holistic growth of the pupils.

Doing a limited amount of study for
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some
hours
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makes
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children
physically
and mentally active. To put it in another way, if there is more time, they would engage themselves in sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
. Playing games would lead to the formation of new cells and rejuvenates the mind,
resultantly
,
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stress
would be
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reduced
. Thence, the proper functioning of the body would take place. Eminent Psychologists have revealed that
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children
who play games daily have more intellectual power than others.

Although sitting long hours for study
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makes
one expertise in their subjects, spending
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some
time on recreational
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activities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in the cognitive development of the students. When the budding minds
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
spare time, it is more likely to indulge theirs in
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some
sort of
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activities
such as painting, dancing, and singing which would definitely enhance their critical
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skills
. In this way, they would not
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only
perform better in scholastic areas
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but
also
in non-scholastic areas,
consequently
, their all-round development would take place.
For instance
, in Switzerland, where
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homework
is
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given
to pupils
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only
at weekends,
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children
are more creative.

In conclusion
,
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homework
is crucial for students,
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but
creativity, which arises from recreational
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activities
, has a significant role in
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in the development of their comprehensive growth
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as their physical and mental growth. Schools had better provide adequate classwork to pupils.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, children have a lot of homework to do. Some people, however, believe that less homework means less stress for children, so they will be able to learn other useful skills. (Sample answer_Misnariah) v. 2

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