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In many countries children spend long hours on homework Some people think that less homework can reduce students stress and give them a chance to develop other skills What is your opinion about this v.1

In many countries children spend long hours on homework Some people think that less homework can reduce students stress and give them a chance to develop other skills What is your opinion about this v. 1
IN THE PRESENT SCENERIO, HIGHER STUDY HAS BECOME VITAL PART OF AN INDIVIDUAL LIVE'S. IT IS OFTEN SAID BY SOME THAT PEOPLE WITH TERTIARY EDUCATION COULD ABLE TO GET HIGHER SALARY WORKS. SOME OPPOSE BY SAYING THAT BESIDES THE EDUCATION IT IS SESSENTIAL TO GAIN EXPERIENCE AND INHANCING BASIC MANNERS. THE FOLLOEING ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE VARIOUS REASONS BIHIND THE BOTH SIDE IN DITAIL AND STATE THE OPINION IN THE FAVOR OF HAVING A PRIMARY QUALITIES LIKE INTERPERSONAL COMMUNICATION, BEHAVIOR ETC AND EXPERIENCE IS THE MOST CRUCIAL IN ANY FIELD. TO START WITH THE BACHELOR DEGREE KNOWLEDGE, IT HAS VARIOUS BENEFITS FIRST OF ALL, FURTHER EDUCATION GIVE HIGHER STATUS IN THE SOCIETY BY MENAS OF PRIDE AND HONOR. TO ELABORATE, SOCIETY WILL RESPECT A PERSON WHO HAS A GOOD EDUCATION AS THEY THONK THAT HAVING DEGREE MEANS KNOWING EVERYTHING ABOUT THE FILED OR MORE KNOWLEDGE SPECIALLY VILLEGERS. FOR AN EXAMPLE I HAVE A BACHELOR OF DENTAL SURGEON DEGREE AND MY VILLEGE IHIBITANTS USED TO SEE ME AS THEIR ACHIEVEMENT BECAUSE I AM THE FEMALE WHO HAS THE DOCTORATE DEGREE. THUS, THEY WORSHIPS ME AS SAME AS GOD. HOWEVER, NOT EVERYONE WITH GOOD STUDY CAN HAVE GOOD JOB OPTIONS DUE TO LACKE OF BASIC UNDERDSTANDING AND NEEDS. ON THE OTHER HAND, IT IS ALSO AN EXPERIENCE AND SOME PRIMARY QUALITIES PLAYS AN IMORTANT ROLE IN OBTAINING GOOD JOB. THE MOST IMPORTANTLY, BASIC KNOWLEDGE LIKE HOW TO BEHAVE IN A GOOD MANNER IS VITAL AND ALSO HAVING SOME EXPERIENCE OF AN WORK. FOR AN EXAMPLE OF MY RELATIVE IS NOT HAVING A DEGREE BUT STILL WITH HARD AND DEDICTION NOW HE IS IN THE POST OF SENIOR MANGER IN THE ON OF THE USA PHARMACUTICAL COMPANY. THUS I STRONGLY BELIEVE IN WORKING HARD AND BUILDING A FUNDAMENTAL SKILLS CAN BE AN ASSET TO GET A GOOD JOB. IF PERSON DOES NOT HAVE THAT SKILLS WHICH SHOULD BE ESSENTIAL FOR EVERYWORK THEN ON ONE GET THE BEST POSITION JOB EVEN THOUGH WITH TERTIARY CERTIFICATES. TO SUM UP, IT SHOULD NOT BE NEGOTIATE THAT IT CAN HELP AT SOME POINT BUT IF PERSON WITHOUT THE EXPERIENCE AND SOFT SKILLS NEVER CAN STAYS FOR A LONGER TIME IN THST HIGHER POSITION. BUT IF THIS TWO CRITERIA COMES TOGATHER THEN THAT INDIVIDUAL WILL BE UNSTOPABLE.
IN THE PRESENT
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SCENERIO
, HIGHER STUDY HAS BECOME VITAL PART OF AN INDIVIDUAL
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LIVE
'S. IT IS
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OFTEN
SAID BY
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SOME
THAT
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PEOPLE
WITH TERTIARY
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EDUCATION
COULD ABLE TO
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GET
HIGHER SALARY WORKS.
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SOME
OPPOSE BY SAYING THAT
BESIDES
THE
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EDUCATION
IT IS
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SESSENTIAL
TO GAIN
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EXPERIENCE
AND
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INHANCING
BASIC MANNERS. THE
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FOLLOEING
ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE VARIOUS REASONS
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BIHIND
THE BOTH SIDE IN
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DITAIL
AND STATE THE OPINION IN THE FAVOR OF
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HAVING
A PRIMARY QUALITIES LIKE INTERPERSONAL COMMUNICATION, BEHAVIOR ETC AND
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EXPERIENCE
IS THE MOST CRUCIAL IN ANY FIELD.

TO
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START
WITH THE BACHELOR
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DEGREE
KNOWLEDGE, IT HAS VARIOUS BENEFITS
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FIRST OF ALL
,
FURTHER
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EDUCATION
GIVE HIGHER STATUS IN THE SOCIETY BY
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MENAS
OF PRIDE AND HONOR. TO ELABORATE, SOCIETY WILL RESPECT A PERSON WHO HAS A
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GOOD
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EDUCATION
AS THEY
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THONK
THAT
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HAVING
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DEGREE
MEANS KNOWING EVERYTHING ABOUT THE FILED OR MORE KNOWLEDGE
SPECIALLY
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VILLEGERS
. FOR AN EXAMPLE I HAVE A BACHELOR OF DENTAL SURGEON
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DEGREE
AND MY
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VILLEGE
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IHIBITANTS
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USED
TO
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SEE
ME AS THEIR ACHIEVEMENT
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BECAUSE
I AM THE FEMALE WHO HAS THE DOCTORATE
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DEGREE
.
THUS
, THEY
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WORSHIPS
ME AS SAME AS GOD.
HOWEVER
, NOT EVERYONE WITH
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GOOD
STUDY CAN HAVE
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GOOD
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JOB
OPTIONS DUE TO
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LACKE
OF BASIC
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UNDERDSTANDING
AND NEEDS.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, IT IS
ALSO
AN
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EXPERIENCE
AND
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SOME
PRIMARY QUALITIES PLAYS AN
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IMORTANT
ROLE IN OBTAINING
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GOOD
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JOB
. THE MOST
IMPORTANTLY
, BASIC KNOWLEDGE LIKE HOW TO BEHAVE IN A
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GOOD
MANNER IS VITAL AND
ALSO
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HAVING
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SOME
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EXPERIENCE
OF AN WORK. FOR AN EXAMPLE OF MY RELATIVE IS NOT
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HAVING
A
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DEGREE
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BUT
STILL
WITH
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HARD
AND
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DEDICTION
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HE IS IN THE POST OF SENIOR MANGER IN
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THE ON OF
THE USA
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PHARMACUTICAL
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COMPANY
.
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THUS
I
STRONGLY
BELIEVE IN WORKING
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HARD
AND BUILDING A FUNDAMENTAL
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SKILLS
CAN BE AN ASSET TO
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GET
A
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GOOD
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JOB
. IF PERSON DOES NOT HAVE THAT
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SKILLS
WHICH SHOULD BE ESSENTIAL FOR
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EVERYWORK
THEN ON ONE
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GET
THE BEST POSITION
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JOB
EVEN THOUGH
WITH TERTIARY CERTIFICATES.

TO SUM UP, IT SHOULD NOT BE
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NEGOTIATE
THAT IT CAN
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HELP
AT
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SOME
POINT
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BUT
IF PERSON WITHOUT THE
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EXPERIENCE
AND SOFT
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SKILLS
NEVER CAN
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STAYS
FOR A LONGER TIME IN
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THST
HIGHER POSITION.
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BUT
IF THIS TWO CRITERIA
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COMES
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TOGATHER
THEN THAT INDIVIDUAL WILL BE
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UNSTOPABLE
.
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IELTS essay In many countries children spend long hours on homework Some people think that less homework can reduce students stress and give them a chance to develop other skills What is your opinion about this v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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