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• Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.4

• Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of their benefits to humanity. v. 4
In the today’s world, there is an increasingly popular tendency that animals are used as the experiment objects for new medicines and other products testing. While some people are of the opinion that those experiments should be prohibited as it violates animal right and is immortal, some still hold the belief that animal testing should be maintained due to its benefits to human’s life. From my perspective, I find the former agreeable for several reasons. On the one hand, some people have their points to against animal testing. The first reason worth mentioning is the fact that a medicine passed the safety test on animal does not mean that it is one hundred percent safe for humans to use. It is obvious that each species has its own characteristics and gene; therefore, different reactions on a specific medicine will be likely to happen. The second argument is that animal testing is clearly cruel and dramatically violates animal rights. To be more specific, in most of the experiments, not only do animal have to suffer a deadly pain, but they are also often killed. Another reason supporting a ban on animal testing is that it is costly to do experiments on animals, as it involves huge investments in state-of-the-art equipment, specialized laboratories, security and training cost for specialists. Clearly, creating an artificial body to do the tests on and developing Artificial Intelligent to analysis and evaluate the effectiveness and safety of new medicines seem to be better choices in long-term. On the other hand, it is reasonable to believe that animal testing should be maintained, due to its advantages. First of all, it is undeniable that all medicines should be tested for side effects and safety reasons. In fact, at the present, doing experiments on animals is the only way to ensure that medicines are safe for humans to use. Secondly, humans should be prioritized over animals. Specifically, it is absolutely better for an animal to suffer, rather than a human to die, for the life-saving purpose. Last but not least, animal testing can help scientists and doctors find new treatments or ways to save lives. For instance, by doing a lot of experiments on bats and rats, specialists were successful in developing a vaccine to effectively prevent humans from Ebola which killed millions of African people in 2015. In conclusion, although it is immortal and expensive to do animal testing, medical experiments on animals for the safety and life-saving purposes should be kept running due to its irrefutable benefits to humanity.
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animals
are
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used
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experiment
objects for new medicines and other products
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testing
. While
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some
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people
are of the opinion that those
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experiments
should
be prohibited
as it violates
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animal
right and is immortal,
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some
still
hold the belief that
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animal
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testing
should
be maintained
due to its benefits to
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human’s
life. From my perspective, I find the former agreeable for several reasons.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
have their points to against
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animal
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testing
. The
first
reason worth mentioning is the fact that a
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medicine
passed the
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safety
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test
on
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animal
does not mean that it is one hundred percent safe for
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humans
to
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use
. It is obvious that each species has its
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own
characteristics and gene;
therefore
,
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different
reactions on a specific
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medicine
will be likely to happen. The second argument is that
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animal
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testing
is
clearly
cruel and
dramatically
violates
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animal
rights. To be more specific, in most of the
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experiments
, not
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only
do
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animal
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have to
suffer a deadly pain,
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but
they are
also
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often
killed. Another reason supporting a ban on
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animal
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testing
is that it is costly to do
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experiments
on
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animals
, as it involves huge investments in state-of-the-art equipment, specialized laboratories, security and training cost for specialists.
Clearly
, creating an artificial body to do the
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tests
on and developing Artificial Intelligent to analysis and evaluate the effectiveness and
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safety
of new medicines seem to be better choices in long-term.

On the other hand
, it is reasonable to believe that
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animal
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testing
should
be maintained
, due to its advantages.
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First of all
, it is undeniable that all medicines should be
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tested
for side effects and
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safety
reasons. In fact, at the present, doing
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experiments
on
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animals
is the
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only
way to ensure that medicines are safe for
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humans
to
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use
.
Secondly
,
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humans
should
be prioritized
over
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animals
.
Specifically
, it is
absolutely
better for an
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animal
to suffer,
rather
than a
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human
to
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die
, for the life-saving purpose. Last
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but
not least,
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animal
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testing
can
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help
scientists and doctors find new treatments or ways to save
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lives
.
For instance
, by doing
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a lot of
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experiments
on bats and rats, specialists were successful in developing a vaccine to
effectively
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prevent
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humans
from Ebola which killed millions of African
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people
in 2015.

In conclusion
, although it is immortal and expensive to do
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animal
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testing
, medical
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experiments
on
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animals
for the
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safety
and life-saving purposes should be
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kept
running due to its irrefutable benefits to humanity.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay • Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of their benefits to humanity. v. 4

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