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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. v.12

Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. v. 12
It is true that animals are used for research in a variety of sitting, including tests to determine the safety of drugs, cosmetics and other substances. Although reasons can be given to justify this view, I personally believe that these experiments should be banned because it is ethically unacceptable. There are several reasons why some people support using the animal in the medical research and other products testing. Firstly, the human is the important being on the planet so everything should be done to ensure human safety and survival. Animal testing enables scientific and researchers to test the safety of medication and other substance with which humans have regular contacts. Drugs, for instance, may pose significant harm to humans, so testing them on animals first give researchers good chance to determine drug safety before human trials are performed. Secondly, researchers aim to minimise the suffering that animals experience in experiments by giving painkiller and anesthetic drugs. However, I would strongly agree with those who believe that animal experiments should be banned. Animal right activists (who defend animal right) argue that the lives of animals should be respected. The benefits of research using animals do not justify the suffering caused and the ethical debate against animals testing. Also, there are alternative non-animals methods of testing. For instance, computerised human - patient simulators and In vitro testing which is defined as a research using human cells and tissue can be used instead of using animals. In conclusion, there are some convincing arguments for and against animal testing, but I strongly believe that we as humans have no moral right to do experiments on animals and we should do everything we can to protect them.
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for
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research
in a variety of sitting, including
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tests
to determine the
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safety
of
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drugs
, cosmetics and other substances. Although reasons can be
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given
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personally
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experiments
should
be banned
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because
it is
ethically
unacceptable.

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some
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people
support using the
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animal
in the medical
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research
and other products
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testing
.
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, the
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human
is the
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important
being on the planet
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so
everything should
be done
to ensure
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human
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safety
and survival.
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Animal
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testing
enables scientific and researchers to
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test
the
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safety
of medication and other substance with which
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humans
have regular contacts.
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,
for instance
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humans
,
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so
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testing
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good
chance to determine
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drug
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safety
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before
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human
trials
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.

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, researchers aim to
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minimise
the suffering that
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animals
experience in
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experiments
by giving painkiller and anesthetic
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drugs
.
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, I would
strongly
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with those who believe that
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animal
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experiments
should
be banned
.
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Animal
right activists (who defend
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animal
right) argue that the
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lives
of
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animals
should
be respected
. The benefits of
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research
using
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animals
do not justify the suffering caused and the ethical debate against
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animals
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testing
.
Also
, there are alternative non-animals methods of
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testing
.
For instance
,
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computerised
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human
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patient simulators and In
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vitro
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testing
which
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as a
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research
using
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human
cells and tissue can be
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used
instead
of using animals.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
convincing arguments for and against
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animal
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testing
,
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but
I
strongly
believe that we as
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humans
have no moral right to do
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experiments
on
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animals and
we should do everything we can to protect them.
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IELTS essay Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. v. 12

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282 words
6.0
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