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People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v.6

People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 6
It is believed that the daily lives of mankind have become more stressful these days. There are various reasons that have caused the situation, and the following essay will discuss in details regarding the causes and some of the ways to address the issue. It is true that the daily routines of people's lives are becoming more stressful nowadays, especially for those who live in big cities, such as in New York, Singapore or Jakarta. One of the factors that have caused the stress is the work pressure. Due to the globalisation and the free trade zone, business competition is getting tougher these days and it has increased the workload of many employees. Besides that, density and traffic have also contributed to the problem as well. Many people have to commute to work at the earliest time of the day and come home late at night to avoid traffic. As a consequence, many of these people are exhausted, frustrated and burn out with their daily lives. There are several things that governments could do to solve the issue. Firstly, as the world economic develop, governments should strictly monitor and review at employers' treatment to their labours. Governments must ensure that companies have been employing their labours at the proportionate working hours to reduce the stress level and to avoid any fatal work accidents. Secondly, governments should also expand their long-term development plan, by developing new areas. By expanding new areas, it is hoped that some of the city people will move to new areas, and it will reduce the density and traffic issues which have caused stress. Thirdly, governments should also add more public facilities, such as playgrounds, parks and sports fields for their residents. It is a fact that doing some recreational and sports activities could reduce the stress level. In conclusion, many experts believe that the day to day lives of people have become more stressful. There are some factors which have caused the problems such as the tight business competition, density and traffic problems. However, there are some steps that governments could do to reduce the stress level, and some of them would be by monitoring the companies, expanding new areas and provide more recreational facilities for the public.
It
is believed
that the daily
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lives
of mankind have become more stressful these days. There are various reasons that have
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caused
the situation, and the following essay will discuss in
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details
regarding the causes and
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some of the
ways to address the issue.

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people
's
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lives
are becoming more stressful nowadays,
especially
for those who
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live
in
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big
cities, such as in
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New
York, Singapore or Jakarta. One of the factors that have
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caused
the
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stress
is the work pressure. Due to the
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globalisation
and the free trade zone, business competition is getting tougher these days and it has increased the workload of
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many
employees.
Besides
that, density and
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traffic
have
also
contributed to the problem
as well
.
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people
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have to
commute to work at the earliest time of the day and
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come
home late at night to avoid
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traffic
. As a consequence,
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many
of these
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people
are exhausted
, frustrated and burn out with their daily
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lives
.

There are several things that
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governments
could do to solve the issue.
Firstly
, as the world economic develop,
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governments
should
strictly
monitor and review at employers' treatment to their
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labours
.
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Governments
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must
ensure that
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companies
have been employing their
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labours
at the proportionate working hours to
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reduce
the
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stress
level and to avoid any fatal work accidents.
Secondly
,
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governments
should
also
expand their long-term development plan, by developing
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new
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areas
. By expanding
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new
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areas
, it
is hoped
that
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some of the
city
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people
will
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move
to
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new
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areas
, and it will
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reduce
the density and
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traffic
issues which have
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caused
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stress
.
Thirdly
,
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governments
should
also
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add
more public facilities, such as playgrounds, parks and sports fields for their residents. It is a fact that doing
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some
recreational and sports activities could
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reduce
the
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stress
level.

In conclusion
,
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many
experts believe that the
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day to day
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lives
of
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people
have become more stressful. There are
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some
factors which have
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caused
the problems such as the tight business competition, density and
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traffic
problems.
However
, there are
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some
steps that
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governments
could do to
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reduce
the
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stress
level, and
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some
of them would be by monitoring the
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companies
, expanding
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new
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areas
and provide more recreational facilities for the public.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
372 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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