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People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v.8

People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 8
In the twenty-first century, it is admittedly, apparent that lives of people around the globe are becoming harsher which eventually cause the citizens to become more stressful. It is important to establish the causes and effective ways in solving the problem. Undoubtedly, following the development of nations, world has become more competitive in terms of career for adults and study for youngsters. Nowadays, employees are expected to do more work as compared to previous days in order to secure a decent job. They may work overtime most of the working days without being paid extra by the company just to finish off loads of work. In addition, students are also becoming more stressful as they are sent by their parents to attend extra tuition classes so that there are improvements in their academic performance. Furthermore, people, these days are more status-conscious and materialistic. Every minute they are thinking of ways to earn more money so that they may become affluent one day which allows them to fulfil their own demand. They believe money is the best tool to gain happiness but in fact, they are wrong. These are the reasons why citizens are more stressful than previously. However, there are tonnes of ways which could prove useful in kerbing this problem. A wise time management is crucial for everyone to have an organised and well-planned timetable. By doing so, people have a specific time of relaxing like spending time with family or friends rather than bury their heads into their works. It is significant to socialise with others or sometimes sharing your problems with family can help people to unwind. Furthermore, exercise plays an indispensable role in mitigating the negative impacts of this problem. During exercise, a chemical is known as endorphin will be released which keep our mind off from stress for a certain period of time. In conclusion, there are several causes which lead to a hectic life. Nevertheless, there are a handful of ways to cope with this problem. I believe we can live in a harmony and yet a relaxing environment provided that we follow the stated practical ways of de-stress.
In the twenty-
first
century, it is
admittedly
, apparent that
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lives
of
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people
around the globe are becoming harsher which
eventually
cause the citizens to become more stressful. It is
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important
to establish the causes and effective
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ways
in solving the problem.

Undoubtedly
, following the development of nations, world has become more competitive in terms of career for adults and study for youngsters. Nowadays, employees are
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expected
to do more
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work
as compared to previous days in order to secure a decent job. They may
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work
overtime most of the working days without
being paid
extra by the
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company
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just
to finish off loads of
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work
.
In addition
, students are
also
becoming more stressful as they are
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sent
by their parents to attend extra tuition classes
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so
that there are improvements in their academic performance.

Furthermore
,
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people
, these days are more status-conscious and materialistic. Every minute they are thinking of
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ways
to earn more money
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so
that they may become affluent one day which
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allows
them to fulfil their
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own
demand. They believe money is the best tool to gain happiness
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but
in fact, they are
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wrong
. These are the reasons why citizens are more stressful than previously.

However
, there are tonnes of
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ways
which could prove useful in
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kerbing
this
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problem
. A wise time management is crucial for everyone to have an
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organised
and well-planned timetable. By doing
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so
,
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people
have a specific time of relaxing like spending time with family or friends
rather
than bury their heads into their works. It is significant to
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socialise
with others or
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sometimes
sharing your
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problems
with family can
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help
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people
to unwind.
Furthermore
, exercise plays an indispensable role in mitigating the
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negative
impacts of this
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problem
. During exercise, a chemical
is known
as endorphin will
be released
which
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keep
our mind off from
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stress
for a certain period of time.

In conclusion
, there are several causes which lead to a hectic life.
Nevertheless
, there are a
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handful
of
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ways
to cope with this
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problem
. I believe we can
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live
in a harmony and
yet
a relaxing environment provided that we follow the stated practical
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ways
of de-
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stress
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
355 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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